Re: [Official!] Project Horizons Comment Crew Chat thread.

[Frost]

From what I get, the most important thing is that it basically boils down to work and practice and perseverance.

Oh, I disagree. In my experience, if at first you don't succeed, you're a fuckup anyway.

[Scienza]

ulfric challenged and beat the high king in fair combat. wouldja blame him for hating outsiders. thr aldmeri dominion banned talos worship. thats why any high elf i see......STAB!

I know this was forever ago, but this is exactly what I was talking about when I said that the Stormcloaks were racist assholes.

[Frost]

ulfric challenged and beat the high king in fair combat. wouldja blame him for hating outsiders. thr aldmeri dominion banned talos worship. thats why any high elf i see......STAB!

I know this was forever ago, but this is exactly what I was talking about when I said that the Stormcloaks were racist assholes.

You know who weren't racist? The real Vikings. They often took on crewmen/slaves/wives from all over the world, from Europe to Africa to those other places full of not-really-people.

[Stringtheory]

fuck it. im too impatient to learn to draw. even if i really wanted to draw shadowflare and silverlining. my 1st two original pony ideas and i cant even draw them. oh and i already saw that milord harmony.

If you really want your ideas drawn I suggest either waiting until an artist you like is taking requests or commissions, rarely will an artist agree to draw something for you randomly when they don't know you.

[Kattlarv]

@Frost: Yeah... tbh, we really, really need to overhaul a shitton of laws... I personally like how the universal whatever court of whatever solved their lawyer "problem". Any lawyer that takes a case, faces the same penalty for accusations if they fail. Not the best way ofc, but cuts out retarded, milking cases.

And like said: It's something I personally flip a bit on. I know it takes like, a minute extra to put the effort into making it actually "make sense" to the world or flesh out a character. But really! It's worth it. At least imo. Gives more immersion. Same with like... people that spend that little effort to make a character ic.

You're forgetting the part that they're awesome and was taught to, and that they actually COULD fend for themselves xP
Also love how almost ever single "manly man" in many main religions today, would be considered a juvenile wimp by viking standards, as none of them can take care of themselves.

And allright. And can partially imagine it.

@Tytan: It's my thing, m'yes! And I know, but pretty much every single instance or mention of it, promotes the same thing. More or less like ex: if in a fantasy, EVERY SINGLE TIME a dwarf was mentioned, someone said the EXACT SAME "facts" about them, copy pasted every time from the first time. Like, it wouldn't hurt if we got told SOMETHING ELSE than that they have beard, drink beer and mine for gold. And unless you recall wrong. BJ was like that BEFORE she was cyber. And WHEN she was cyber, her sole point (and about the only time she even thinks or mentions about her sex) was that she was glad how that one part of her was flesh and blood. There has been NO mention that it would be reduced in pleasure. She said it was the only thing that made her feel alive. As for pleasure overall, Even GLORY pulled that fucktarded comment. Unless I'm mistaken, she never mentioned getting off with generic pegatard, yet still claimed it to be great sex. (due to said "she might totally do it again") There's a overall consensus that the male orgasm is far superior and the only important thing in PH. As said, in chapter with plot convenience prince asswipe, BJ's "bragging" or what to call it to Psycho was not to point out he had illogical mary sue endurance, so that he might have bigger chance of pleasuring her due to his incompetence at giving pleasurable sex, it was that HE could use HER to satisfy his needs. That was BJ's "pro" with him. That he was great at pleasuring himself a dozen of times using a mare for his gain. That she saw as a great quality for a male to have. And as said: Atop that, BJ has had a monologe over how fucking amazing dick is and how she'd never be able to live without it. She's only ever made cock jokes and cock references. She's walked around thinking about how big different males dicks have been, along with wondering the size of certain plot males she's look at. She comes off more as a cock+cum obsessed whore than a lesbian. She's never once even mentioned shit about Glory's package. Not to mention the retarded scene where both BJ, and Pshycho goes grossly OOC just to fanwank Styg with a "yeah, he does have a HUGE dick..." not to forget the utterly miserably failed running gag ONE person found funny about BJ constantly praising styg for how amazing he was in bed, despite the fact he sucked ass. (or well, he wasn't THAT good. but you get the point) Point being, BJ has not even once made any effort to stick out as a lesbian, or shown more or less any sign to be from 99. Heck, unless I recall wrong, the first she saw, and the only she focused on when she came in on midnight in the "digitally enhanced" chapter one, was the dick of the pony doing the pony she supposed drolled over and had wanted to fuck for years. Not what it was going into or anything. And again, unless I recall wrong, didn't she walk around longing for her time in the queue? Trying to find fucks to "pass the time" with until she could get "proper sex", in which she could spend her time sexually satisfying a male?

Still a very lazy oversight. Incredibly sloppy even considering the stable they wanted to portray. Heck, so far it just seems that the few mares willing to rape, have been mentally fucked up psychotic cases. That it was something so severely wrong with them that they could even consider such a heinous act and crime against nature. And For all I can recall, she's thought about her eye growing a dick more times than she's ever mentioned her own pussy. Other than the "Oh noes! I might have become infertile! And then I can't have that delicious male sperm taken into my womb to fertilize my eggs so that I can perform my duty as a mare to give birth!" way.

And yes, spending a few days outside her stable instantly reverses her entire way of thinking to replace every authority figure and term for male pronouns. It was just a few chapters in she refer to someone, I think it was a mare as "strong as a stallion", (or that she wasn't as strong as one) not to mention "crying like a filly", which in their stable ought to be "cry like a colt", considering colts were usually the ones crying, along with the ones that were meek. And as I think I've said before. that whole scene, and pretty much all of the follow up events are just a piece of crap. Most of which are just shoehorned for plot convenience. There was a shitton of things Somber could've done to quadruple the quality, but fuck that! lets cram in generic, bland shit and go ooc to have plot convenience and get to write about dicks getting pleasured, and mares getting abused as cumdumpsters and being okay with it, loving it in fact, because they should know their place! Seriously, the first thing BJ did was pop a boner over the situation and went all "YES! DICKS!". I'd even found it more believable if she went all "arlgebargle!" and ripped a cock off, then sprayed tk-bullets wildly from the direction she heard sounds, (she had her shotgun strength bullets by now, yet it didn't do shit in this one scene when she used it point blank, when it insta gibbed anything in prior scene from half a mile away) or above her, considering she was mounted too. But no, she can't kill some poor, innocent males that only wanted to rape her. That'd be bellow her, she's a lady after all. A lot of the following crap after that only felt like it was there for the "grimdark" equivalence of "jump scares" that pretend to be horror games.

And yes, but even THAT is less than Swe's current number xD

(and psh, wuzz xD Rank some more in wall of text)

@EP: Oh, on a side note, which one of you guys have seen my latest flash? xP
Also, I should soon have the Luna pic to complete the 5 picture combo.

@Baa: Well, you could always create them in the pony creator first.

@Kipper: Challange?

@Robo: Really? Since, I don't see where it starts. Really. She got a bare flank, then suddenly around under where her endowment ends, she got a dress flowing down with no visible place it's connected to... least to what I recall of memory.

[Kippershy]

@Kipper: Challange?

Clop story challenge. Which, by the way, I was meaning to tell you.
While writing it I thought of you and added a female bukkake scene.

[Katarn]

@Kipp:

[Frost]

@Frost: Yeah... tbh, we really, really need to overhaul a shitton of laws... I personally like how the universal whatever court of whatever solved their lawyer "problem". Any lawyer that takes a case, faces the same penalty for accusations if they fail. Not the best way ofc, but cuts out retarded, milking cases.

And like said: It's something I personally flip a bit on. I know it takes like, a minute extra to put the effort into making it actually "make sense" to the world or flesh out a character. But really! It's worth it. At least imo. Gives more immersion. Same with like... people that spend that little effort to make a character ic.

You're forgetting the part that they're awesome and was taught to, and that they actually COULD fend for themselves xP
Also love how almost ever single "manly man" in many main religions today, would be considered a juvenile wimp by viking standards, as none of them can take care of themselves.

I've said it before, and I'll say it again--the world would be a better place if America had been settled by Vikings instead of pussy-ass Englishmen, Spaniards and Frenchies.

They were here already, for fuck's sake. They stayed around just long enough to inspire legends of huge, bloodthirsty deathly-pale men from beyond the sea, then left. I know they weren't big on colonization but come on, guys

@EP: Oh, on a side note, which one of you guys have seen my latest flash? xP
Also, I should soon have the Luna pic to complete the 5 picture combo.

I wouldn't know where to find them, sadly, as they sound rather intriguing. PM/Skype me a link?

@Robo: Really? Since, I don't see where it starts. Really. She got a bare flank, then suddenly around under where her endowment ends, she got a dress flowing down with no visible place it's connected to... least to what I recall of memory.

So far as I can tell, she's wearing skintight stockings.

[brony all alone]

"Immortality, for vamponies,it means a gift and a curse at the same time. we are hated and feared. even if your a mortal, your still my best friend. for how long ive known you, i thank you from the bottom of my heart. your the kindest and bravest pony ever silver." SilverLining, a beautiful white coated, silver maned pegasus replied,"My my shadow,and you call me the sensitive one. My fathers done nothing for me, so youre the only family i have, even if not by blood, youre still a brother to me." ShadowFlare, a tall and masculine vampony pegasus with a fire red coat and blood mane with orange eyes started to say something. "Silver",
"yeah, whats up?"
"I.....i.....uh"
"NOW ARRIVING IN PONYVILLE"
"Thats us Shadow" the mare trotted to the traincar door," you coming." and like that the red vampony followed his only friend out of the car and into Ponyville. He never forgot to put on his hood,orange eyes attract some weird stares from others.

that is just a small part of my new fanfic Undying Emotions. hope you enjoyed it. tell me what you thought of it. these characters are original by me.

[Kippershy]

It's the same as your other "fanfic".
As I said to you before, you don't even have a premise there. Merely explaining the very basic outline of my story could probably take up as much space as that and the only reason I'm saying 'could' is because I'm being too lazy to consider writing it up to see if it would or not.

Think up a proper story, think up motivations, think up goals.
Once you have that, write something proper rather than two lines of dialogue.

[Stringtheory]

*snip*

If you're writing a fic you can create a specific thread for it in the fanfiction folder and simply post a link to it for those who are interested instead of clogging up this thread. (also the names for your OCs' could use some work and ditto for what Kipper said)

[brony all alone]

:*(

[Ketchup]

"Immortality, for vamponies,it means a gift and a curse at the same time. we are hated and feared. even if your a mortal, your still my best friend. for how long ive known you, i thank you from the bottom of my heart. your the kindest and bravest pony ever silver." SilverLining, a beautiful white coated, silver maned pegasus replied,"My my shadow,and you call me the sensitive one. My fathers done nothing for me, so youre the only family i have, even if not by blood, youre still a brother to me." ShadowFlare, a tall and masculine vampony pegasus with a fire red coat and blood mane with orange eyes started to say something. "Silver",
"yeah, whats up?"
"I.....i.....uh"
"NOW ARRIVING IN PONYVILLE"
"Thats us Shadow" the mare trotted to the traincar door," you coming." and like that the red vampony followed his only friend out of the car and into Ponyville. He never forgot to put on his hood,orange eyes attract some weird stares from others.

that is just a small part of my new fanfic Undying Emotions. hope you enjoyed it. tell me what you thought of it. these characters are original by me.

Not a creative writer, but a few things I'd suggest.

Later on when you have more than a few sentences, spread physical descriptions across paragraphs. Much less 'in your face', so to speak. By dumping that much exposition about past and relationships plus physical traits, the passages become rather clunky.

I suggest you capitalize things where needed. Capitalization is a necessity in proper grammar, not an option. Sort out 'your' and 'you're', and other contractions. Without proper form or at least what looks like it, most people won't read the story. I'd also suggest pinning down a tense and perspective.

Not sure if that's what you're looking for, though.

[Kippershy]

Here's something to put things to perspective for you.
I just wrote a clopfic that is 7.7k long. 7,747 words into a clopfic.
I've previously wrote a different clopfic that was exactly 7,777 words long that challenged something from a story and made people consider things in a different light. Some people see that clop story as headcanon to explain other things in the original story that were pretty ham-handed.

Why does it matter? Well, when there's potential for enough depth in something like a clopfic that it can do things like that, it really shows the difference.
I've been writing for not far off two years now, but that's not long at all considering I hadn't ever done any creative writing before.
Put some effort into it and perhaps you'll get somewhere. You'll need to keep on trying, no-one scores gold on their first time running a marathon, but you'll learn if you just put the effort in and listen to advice.

[Scyto Harmony]

@Kipp:

get that shit outta here you

[Kippershy]

@Kipp:

Are you implying that Rarity isn't a total slut and used to it? That she doesn't enjoy it?

[Scyto Harmony]

@Kipp:

Are you implying that Rarity isn't a total slut and used to it? That she doesn't enjoy it?

ill kick ur as i swer it on me mum

[Kippershy]

U wot m8
I'll fukken av ya

[Scienza]

ShadowFlare, a tall and masculine vampony pegasus with a fire red coat and blood mane with orange eyes started to say something.

This is literally the OC that people bring up when they talk about how terrible nearly all OCs are.

[Scyto Harmony]

ill bash ur fken ead in

[Frost]

ShadowFlare, a tall and masculine vampony pegasus with a fire red coat and blood mane with orange eyes started to say something.

This is literally the OC that people bring up when they talk about how terrible nearly all OCs are.

At least he's not an Alicorn, though

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[Kippershy]

I'll fukken do you over
bury you twelve feet under just to make sure you don't out... m8

[Frost]

Gentlemen, gentlemen, please. You're an Englishman and a Canadian. I expect this sort of thing from the Aussies, the Yanks, and especially the Scots, but you have a reputation to uphold. Now, how about you settle your differences over a nice cup of maple-syrup/ tea while I go engorge myself on McDonald's and foreign oil?

[Scyto Harmony]

I'll fukken do you over
bury you twelve feet under just to make sure you don't out... m8

[Scienza]

I'll fukken do you over
bury you twelve feet under just to make sure you don't out... m8

u wan 1v1 m8? im a fukken mlgpr0, bich. 1v1 nao. GT: xXxMLGPR0SNIPERSHOTGUNASSASSINWEEDSMOKEDELTASQUAD1337R34P34NOOBKILLAEXPLOSIONTITS69xXx

[Aonee]

I'll fukken do you over
bury you twelve feet under just to make sure you don't out... m8

u wan 1v1 m8? im a fukken mlgpr0, bich. 1v1 nao. GT: xXxMLGPR0SNIPERSHOTGUNASSASSINWEEDSMOKEDELTASQUAD1337R34P34NOOBKILLAEXPLOSIONTITS69xXx

Fixed.

[Kippershy]

U fukken startin or wot?
Shut ur fukken fays m8 or i'll 360 n0sc0pe u u fukken wanker bullshit cunt m8
I'm fukken ard innit

[Scienza]

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[CamoBadger]

U fukken startin or wot?
Shut ur fukken fays m8 or i'll 360 n0sc0pe u u fukken wanker bullshit cunt m8
I'm fukken ard innit

What the fuck did you just fucking say about me, you little bitch? I’ll have you know I graduated top of my class in the Navy Seals, and I’ve been involved in numerous secret raids on Al-Quaeda, and I have over 300 confirmed kills. I am trained in gorilla warfare and I’m the top sniper in the entire US armed forces. You are nothing to me but just another target. I will wipe you the fuck out with precision the likes of which has never been seen before on this Earth, mark my fucking words. You think you can get away with saying that shit to me over the Internet? Think again, fucker. As we speak I am contacting my secret network of spies across the USA and your IP is being traced right now so you better prepare for the storm, maggot. The storm that wipes out the pathetic little thing you call your life. You’re fucking dead, kid. I can be anywhere, anytime, and I can kill you in over seven hundred ways, and that’s just with my bare hands. Not only am I extensively trained in unarmed combat, but I have access to the entire arsenal of the United States Marine Corps and I will use it to its full extent to wipe your miserable ass off the face of the continent, you little shit. If only you could have known what unholy retribution your little “clever” comment was about to bring down upon you, maybe you would have held your fucking tongue. But you couldn’t, you didn’t, and now you’re paying the price, you goddamn idiot. I will shit fury all over you and you will drown in it. You’re fucking dead, kiddo.

[Harmony Ltd.]

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