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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Icy Shake Sun Oct 07, 2012 3:29 pm
Cptadder wrote:You can but you have to change your style of address, titles of Royalty always go last.Kippershy wrote:stringtheory wrote:don't you mean Lord, sorry King of Derail?Kippershy wrote:
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Another flawless victory by Kipper! Thread derailer extraordinaire!
You can be a king and an extraordinaire at the same time... right?
So it would be
His Highness (Acknowledgment of birth), the Thread Derailer Extraordinaire!(A list of all titles, awards and honors due) King Kipper (Formal title) the Ist (Place in lineage)
A Lord would list titles awards and honors first and not list place in lineage at all so thus
the Thread Derailer Extraordinare! Lord Kipper!
Going full out, I'd probably put it
His Royal Majesty, the Thread Derailer Extraordinaire, King Kipper I
since the kingly rank and above are normally "majesties" prefaced by "imperial", "royal", or "imperial and royal", depending on the specific titles held.
Of course, for my money, there's really no beating Roman the naming practices which gave us such gems as "The August Conqueror Caesar, Son of the Deified."
Where HiE is concerned, I think that much of it falls to the same problem as anything else: Sturgeon's Law. I will grant that where the motivation is wish fulfillment, the story's plot, characterization, and narrative cohesion can suffer. But I'm confident that the problem lies less with the subject matter and more with the writers; I've come to accept more and more over time that a skilled writer can make poor premises enjoyable--indeed, even good--if they put in the effort to build in the right tone and put thought into characterization and plot.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Stringtheory Sun Oct 07, 2012 3:35 pm
yeah, sure I'll read itIncoherentOrange wrote:If we're on the subject of HiE, does anyone want to see what I've got of the first chapter of my new story, which happens to be one? It's got hints of wish fulfillment, but not in the characters, but the setting. Because spaceships are cool.
When I wrote my stories, I tried to avoid wish fulfillment, ending up giving a character that happened to be a manifestation of myself a hard time; pretty much nothing he does is what he wants to do. But that alone doesn't make it good, not at all.
Wish Fulfillment in the setting , in my opinion, barely even counts as WF, just because it's generally not very obvious, but with characters...it was obvious that Griffin was a Escapist Character, and the reason why I kept reading for that long was because of that fact
well, you don't want EVERYTHING to go badly for your main character, otherwise that's no fun to read because we know he'll just fail or he's a Butt Monkey, which usually is okay if played for laughs
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by IncoherentOrange Sun Oct 07, 2012 3:47 pm
Well, the character suffers more knocks than the rest because he's less capable. He's hardly the butt monkey, but the plot doesn't pat him on the back. It's an old story.
Anyway, have 2898 unedited words. I don't want a full derail here, but just read it and give me little bits of feedback. The perspective might be kooky; I've only just started using it.
It's not finished yet.
Anyway, have 2898 unedited words. I don't want a full derail here, but just read it and give me little bits of feedback. The perspective might be kooky; I've only just started using it.
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The counter reached zero, indicating arrival at the coordinates designated by the navigator at the start of the voyage. Eclipse slowed to sublight velocities. They had arrived at last, hopefully. "Navigation, check," the Skipper ordered. "Fire boosters, eliminate gravitational spin."
If they had arrived, that would mean they were in high orbit over the planet P-0134-A--or, as some might've called it, New Earth, though a definitive name had yet to be determined--their destination, the planet that would hopefully soon become the home of over seven thousand people. That is, if Eclipse's navigator and computer had made their calculations correctly, two decades ago when the course was first laid.
"Uh huh," Killian acknowledged in an ever-so-slightly jovial tone, "firing boosters... gravity offline. Telemetry coming in. I was off by ten thousand kilometers, but we're here, Skipper." Killian Reynolds was the chief Spacer navigator aboard Eclipse. 'Spacer' was a term that described any individual capable of operating an FTL drive. Understanding the intricacies of faster-than-light travel was reserved for the best and brightest--one couldn't simply pick up a book and read about it, as it was simply too complex for a mere man or woman--be they a physicist or a simpleton with a passion for science--to understand. It took an intellectual gift, a knack for understanding the un-understandable. As the ship became oriented with the planet being 'downward', the interior of the ship was filled with the distinctive feel of microgravity. Now, the entire crew knew of the conclusion of their journey, if they had not been minding the mission timers positioned in major areas to remind the crew of how long their journey would last.
"Ventral camera. Let's see our new home." The Skipper could barely keep his voice level. He, along with over seven thousand others, had long awaited this day, the day that they would arrive to stake a claim on the first earthlike planet ever to be visited by mankind. The excitement was likely felt by every man and woman aboard, and seemed to hang heavily in the the sterile, carefully-controlled and filtered air of the Eclipse's vast compartments and modules. Even Killian seemed excited.
"Sure thing, Skipper." The display at the front of the bridge lit up as communications officer Marcus Thorne flipped a switch on his console, which also contained the switches for the PA system, among other things. An all-encompassing view of the lone planet in the system, as blue as Earth was, but with a distinctly alien--though of the same palette of colors one could see on Earth--geography, appeared on the monitor at the front of the bridge.
"Close enough, Killian. Close enough," the Skipper said, beaming.
"No, no, not close enough, Skipper. Had I made that mistake in some other direction, or misplaced a decimal another place-"
"Killian, why does it matter? You won't be plotting another FTL course in your entire life!" Marcus excaimed, then glanced back at his console. "Skipper, Topography A reports that their survey is underway. Launch bay reports that atmospheric analysis drones have been launched..." He spun, strapped down in his chair, to face the Skipper. "Isn't this exciting!?"
The Skipper did not answer the communications officer's question; it was answered well enough by the wide grin on his face. "Sensors, what have we got?"
Life support officer Kathy Wright doubled as sensors officer, and would triple as xenobiologist when they made planetfall, after which these other two functions would become only minutely important. She began to list off the various bits of information displayed by her workstation, as relayed by those manning sensory instruments aboard. "Orbit path is clear. That star is... orbiting around the planet, as I've got it here. Looks like those kooky theories were correct after all. One natural satellite, as probe telemetry has already told us. No other planets, as we already know... oh, preliminary geographical analysis coming in. Three continents, one bigger than the others. Eighty-one percent water coverage, one hundred and one point six percent Earth gravity. No peculiar noise on radio frequencies, radiation levels within acceptable limits..."
The Skipper interrupted her with an order. He didn't need to hear how earthlike this place was another time. All he needed was confirmation from one of his crew instead of those guys sitting on Pluto that spent their days listening for probe telemetry, from the self-replicating probe network that had discovered this planet. "Killian, bring us into geosynchronous orbit with the center of the largest continent. Let's give the boys down in topography something more important than the ocean to look at."
"Um-hm," came the navigator's reply. Formalities of command were very lax aboard Eclipse; it was technically a civilian ship, and on top of that, the crew had taken plenty of time to become well-aquainted with one another during the twenty-year trip; each and every one of the department heads and bridge crew knew each other on a first name basis, except for the Skipper, who was to everyone aboard just that--the Skipper, who preferred the title over 'Commander' or 'Captain', for reasons not many would know. The ship shuddered slightly as its plasma engines came online, for the first time since Eclipse cleared the shipyard at which she was built, in orbit around Mercury.
Several anxious minutes went by. It was established as standard procedure for this mission that no action to land would be undertaken until topographical studies were conducted thoroughly enough to find an optimal spot for planetfall. A tone rang out, and Marcus scanned his console. "Skipper," the communications officer began, "urgent from topography A."
The Skipper nodded, and Marcus hit the intercom switch. "Skipper, there's something down here you've got to see!" said the voice from the speaker, with enthusiasm never before expressed by the chief topographer, Micheal LeBlanc.
"Would you mind telling me from there?" the Skipper asked. It was a fairly long trip from the bridge to the topography labs. "Or, even better, give us your feed."
"Yes, Skipper, right away--here you are." The monitor at the front of the bridge lit up with a different image, this time from the powerful imaging system used by the topography lab. What it showed was something the Skipper--and the rest of the bridge crew--didn't expect to ever see. Appearing on the monitor was a clear aerial view of a modestly-sized... town.
A town. A town of buildings and movement. Not just life, but civilization. Jaws dropped. "You haven't seen the best of it, yet," said the voice from the intercom. The image enhanced, tracking one moving object. It enhanced further and further, until the alien was clearly visible. A light-blue quadruped with a horn protruding from its forehead, a basket... levitating, as it seemed, immediately in front of it, full of what appeared to be some sort of fruit.
"Are you sure these... life forms are not simply wildlife, Mike?" The creature looked like a horse--no, that was more like a unicorn. Whatever it might have been, it was oddly-coloured, that was certain.
"Positive. There is no indication of any other creatures that might be influencing their movements. Skipper, we're looking at aliens. Sentient... horse aliens. Oh, wait, there's more." The feed from the camera showed Mike adjusting the zoom and aquiring another specimen of this species, this one a shade of yellow. "This one has wings..." He moved it again, to yet a third specimen, burgundy. Each one, as it was easily noted, had some mark on their hindquarters, though none of those could be made out at this altitude, even with such powerful magnification. "This one has neither a horn nor wings..." He panned to a pair of colorful natives. "And these two, Skipper, are talking."
Kathy had been carefully observing the creatures' deliberate movements, and had deduced quickly, that these were no mere animals. They were looking at just what Micheal had said--horse aliens, or, more accurately, horse aliens, pegasus aliens, and unicorn aliens. Remarkable, she thought, that such a species could exist. Herbivores on Earth lacked the nutrients in their diets for their brains to become complicated enough to develop sapience, at least, that's what many leading theories had stated. The unexplainable levitating basket, however, was either evidence of advanced technology in this visually-simple town of theirs, or evidence that this world did not follow the same rules as the only other life-supporting planet ever observed--Earth. Kathy was currently leaning toward the latter, especially considering how oddly the star was behaving, what with it swinging as an impossible speed around the planet. She let out a thoughtful sigh, but said nothing. She'd wait for hands-on analysis to make heads or tails of these creatures--that is, if the Skipper would let her.
"What are we going to do, Skipper?" the topographer asked through the intercom, "Let the crew know?"
The pressure was on. The previous Earth day the Skipper had gone over standard operating procedure for various scenarios Eclipse was prepared for. This particular one, finding P-0134-A to be inhabited, had been one of those. It specified that the local civilization's level of technological sophistication--military and observational capabilities along with some semblance of a population count were defined as most important--and natural demeanor be determined, at which point a course of action would be determined by the CO, who was, obviously, the Skipper. He was well-qualified to handle the situation, he just hadn't thought it'd ever come to pass; he was never overly-optimistic about there being intelligent life here, and had thought it too unlikely. Yet, here it was, showing on a monitor in front of him.
He cleared his throat. "Yes, let them know. We're no longer colonists, ladies and gentlemen, we're visitors. It's up to them whether we stay or go." He paused for a moment to gauge the reactions of the bridge crew, who nodded in turn when he looked at each of them, then smiled. "Let's just hope they have room for seven thousand more. Kathy, what have the atmospheric drones uncovered?"
"In short, air's breathable, Skipper. You know the risks," the scientist replied.
'Risks' meant alien viruses and bacteria. Human immune systems were completely unprepared to deal with such things. Antigens had to be synthesized to innoculate the entire crew before they could establish the colony, and for that, crew members would have to take samples of local flora, fauna, and atmosphere. The drones would handle some of it, and were programmed to take samples from around the planet, but only of the atmosphere. It was one of their first objectives. Other possible concerns are a lack of dominating bacteria and viruses on the planet. It was a dual-edged sword; if Earth microbes arrived here, it would likely be just as disasterous. As such, Eclipse was ninety-nine percent sterilized, its crew having taken supplements designed to remove most types of indigeonous microbial life from their bodies and replacing them with genetically-engineered, durable and docile microbes that would not cause nearly as much trouble if they got out.
"Alright, come nightfall, we're going down there. Topography, find out all you can before nightfall on this area of the planet. We're looking for signs of technology, population centers, a landing site, and a colony site. Inform Topography B."
Eclipse was built to split into eight parts; a command module and seven colony modules. The colony modules contained everything the colonists needed, and were capable of re-entry and landing one their own, while the command module was the ship's bridge, engines, communication and sensors equipment, space-based research labs, like the topography labs, and emergency supplies.
"Yes, Skipper, right away. We'll take a peek and send our findings your way," came the reply from the intercom. The Skipper gestured at Marcus to toggle the communication line.
"Well, this is unexpected," Killian said. "This place is so... odd, I don't like it."
"What don't you like?" the Skipper prodded. "Alien life, sentient life. It's a discovery to go down in the history books. We're here, we're safe, and we may be welcomed here." The Skipper knew how optimistic he sounded, but when other outcomes soured his mind to believe in their likelihood, he decided it best to project the best possible scenario; that their mission was not compromised by some colorful horse aliens, and that they'd allow the colony to exist peacefully.
"It's just not right, here. The star is not obeying the laws of physics--that I know for sure--this place is so uncannily-earthlike that it seems too good to be true. I just don't like it. All we've learned about this place makes me uneasy, and we just got here."
The Skipper chuckled. "Are you suggesting that this is some sort of trap? A mirage?" he asked, half-jokingly.
"No, Skipper, it's just-"
"For crying out loud, Killian, nothing has gone wrong, and there's no indication that it will," Marcus interrupted. Killian shot him a glare.
"Or that it won't," Kathy interjected. "We should not jump to conclusions about anything out here. Meeting intelligent life is a very delicate matter, one we won't get another shot at until we find another inhabited planet, which may never happen. The star throws all of our rules out the window and blows a raspberry at them, sure, but it hasn't done us any harm, and neither has this planet or its inhabitants. Let's take this slow, wait and see what we can make of all this. As you said, Killian, we've only just arrived. There is much more to this place than meets the eye, I agree with you on that, but we can not let that hold us back."
"Marcus," the Skipper began, changing the subject, "let the crew know."
Marcus nodded, and leaned in to the microphone on his station, then keyed the PA system. "Ladies and gentlemen, we have discovered that there is intelligent life on the surface of the planet. Quadrupedal herbivores, as far as we know. Stay tuned for further announcements, and remember to take your D-vitamin supplements."
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Twilight Sparkle's telescope was a gift from the Princess herself, one of the most powerful ever made, she'd been told. Tonight, she'd so some stargazing, a rather calming activity for the studious mare. Adjusting the instrument with her magic, she aimed the telescope at Luna's moon, to finish her adjustments, and leaned in to gaze through the layers of magnifying glass.
A small, peculiar grey object, apparently too small to be seen with the naked eye, could be seen in front of the moon. It did not move with the stellar object as it went through the sky. Levitating a cloth to the end of the telescope, she wiped it, then looked back through the optic and frowned. The object was still there. She switched lenses and focused it. Again, it was still there.
Upon closer inspection, the object was a long, almost cylindrical--or perhaps rectangular--thing. She'd seen nothing like it before. With no lenses more powerful to see the object through, she noted whatever she could about the object before the enticing notion of sleep overrode her will to learn more about it. For now, at least.
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The Eclipse's launch bay was home to a dozen collapsible Luna-class spaceplanes, for reconnaissance and transport. Provisions had been made to arm them, should it prove necessary. There had been no telling what kind of creatures Eclipse would find on this planet, and they could well have been much stronger and hardier than those on Earth, for a variety of reasons.
As such, Eclipse had--unusually for a civilian vessel--an armory, a big one. Maintained aboard was a security force of sorts--one thousand of the crew were trained to a varying extent in handling weaponry. The C-40 assault rifle was their standard issue, a weapon that held ninety small armor-piercing projectiles in a magazine and fired three-round bursts within a tight spread, to defeat the strongest of body armor--and hopefully creature hide--and inflict maximum damage. Also available were sedation dart rounds, a mere one of which was capable of putting a human under for an hour or two. Three rounds could easily put someone out for the better part of a day. Eclipse carried enough supplies of the weapon and its ammunition for the entire force. Along with it were the main 'armament' of the ship, which consisted of numerous turrets intended for shooting down asteroids, and what SolGov had called 'handling other threats'.
The notion that any of these weapons were necessary at all worried the Skipper, though he knew them to be justified; Eclipse was made to be equipped for any situation, including armed conflict and even boarding by hostile entities. Also visible in the launch bay were a dozen all-terrain six-seated vehicles, capable of being stored within a Luna. These vehicles resembled an armored personnel carrier than a small bus or van, but unarmed, again with provisions for arming them. Equipped for anything, the Skipper mused.
"Are you sure we shouldn't wait until the next night to do this? It wouldn't hurt to wait, I don't think," Killian said. As with Kathy and many members of the crew, he had other responsibilities that started after Eclipse arrived at P-0134-A; he was the chief of security. Along with a deputy, Sean Powell, he'd provide security for the landing party, the rest of which consisted of Kathy and her two assistants, and the Skipper.
It's not finished yet.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Kippershy Sun Oct 07, 2012 3:53 pm
To be honest... the aspect of human in equestria itself doesn't bother me too much.
That said though, I mean it on a very flat term (roll with me) in that I'm saying human / equestria itself isn't the bane of my world.
Now, like previously mentioned, what DOES give me issue is how often the HiE fics go rolling around with the mane6 for any reason.
"Gotta save the day with Twilight and her friends!" Cliché as fuck and boring.
Twilight being called by the princess to figure out (with her) what this strange new creature is and where it may have come from? Not half as bad, but still usually goes to shit with some save the day aspect.
Humans bringing war to Equestria... psh, again, not a fan of it.
A human getting into Equestria by means of time travel or some such would be interesting to me - say, be it because of The Doctor or something.
The TARDIS lands in some small village (NOT ponyville) in Equestria... friendship is formed between one of the humans and an O.C pony despite the fact that all the others are extremely cautious about this new thing arriving out of nowhere.
Because of this friendship....
You know what, I'm considering writing that now. Though, remove the doctor. I'll do it somehow else.
That said though, I mean it on a very flat term (roll with me) in that I'm saying human / equestria itself isn't the bane of my world.
Now, like previously mentioned, what DOES give me issue is how often the HiE fics go rolling around with the mane6 for any reason.
"Gotta save the day with Twilight and her friends!" Cliché as fuck and boring.
Twilight being called by the princess to figure out (with her) what this strange new creature is and where it may have come from? Not half as bad, but still usually goes to shit with some save the day aspect.
Humans bringing war to Equestria... psh, again, not a fan of it.
A human getting into Equestria by means of time travel or some such would be interesting to me - say, be it because of The Doctor or something.
The TARDIS lands in some small village (NOT ponyville) in Equestria... friendship is formed between one of the humans and an O.C pony despite the fact that all the others are extremely cautious about this new thing arriving out of nowhere.
Because of this friendship....
You know what, I'm considering writing that now. Though, remove the doctor. I'll do it somehow else.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Ironmonger Sun Oct 07, 2012 3:55 pm
If someone is killed by a drill wouldn't that mean they were bored to death? 
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by RoboRed Sun Oct 07, 2012 4:04 pm
Somber wrote:Sorry everypony but due to my grotesque and manifest failures, chapter 51 will not be completed this weekend. This is completely me fault and I apologize deeply for it.
Sorry.
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...Your punishment will be 100 bear hugs and 25 lashes with a wet bundle of parsley.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by RoboRed Sun Oct 07, 2012 4:10 pm
Downloaded Skill wrote:stringtheory wrote:NOOOOOOOOOOOOketchup504 wrote:No.Kippershy wrote:Today I figured something out...
Somber is the biggest troll going... ever.
Why?
Project Horizons is secretly a HiE fic and he plans to turn Blackjack into a human so she can win against TEoS!
BELIEVE IT PEOPLE! SOMBER CONFIRMED BIGGEST TROLL.
*Obligatory*
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Ironmonger Sun Oct 07, 2012 4:40 pm
Might have to use Google Chrome to view
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Stringtheory Sun Oct 07, 2012 4:44 pm
an interesting example would be The Dread Chitin, but it kinda happens in reverse and it's RD and Twilight, going to a hostile alien world, through the ever so popular plot starter of Twilight messing up a spell (hey, it works), meeting a human who's also trapped there, but this human comes from some original setting of the author's where some humans have magic, and the place this human was using as a base is an abandoned Battletech base (how it got there is never explained), plus it's written by the guy who wrote A Foul Light Shines, the only 40k/MLP crossover that in my opinion actually works in my opinionKippershy wrote:*snip*
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Orm Sun Oct 07, 2012 4:45 pm
Now if only I knew what the hell any of that meant.Kippershy wrote:Today I figured something out...
Somber is the biggest troll going... ever.
Why?
Project Horizons is secretly a HiE fic and he plans to turn Blackjack into a human so she can win against TEoS!
BELIEVE IT PEOPLE! SOMBER CONFIRMED BIGGEST TROLL.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Kippershy Sun Oct 07, 2012 5:16 pm
Currently writing my own [new] fic, called Of the skies and stars.
Trying to reach 2k words so I can push for it to be published before I tuck in for the night.
Currently at 1.5k with the only pony reference being his name (James Mane)... oh, and I call the shuttle Celestia One.
It starts that James is a scientist / astronaut who is about to be testing the experimental hyper warp-drive (first of any of its kind) on his own.
His mission is to go to the nearest galaxy and back.
In that galaxy? Equestria.
James has no combat abilities and nor will he need any.
There's not going to be a sudden, instant romance.
There's not going to be ANY canon character involved or even referenced barring Celestia and Luna.
They most likely will play no role.
I'll see where it goes.
Trying to reach 2k words so I can push for it to be published before I tuck in for the night.
Currently at 1.5k with the only pony reference being his name (James Mane)... oh, and I call the shuttle Celestia One.
It starts that James is a scientist / astronaut who is about to be testing the experimental hyper warp-drive (first of any of its kind) on his own.
His mission is to go to the nearest galaxy and back.
In that galaxy? Equestria.
James has no combat abilities and nor will he need any.
There's not going to be a sudden, instant romance.
There's not going to be ANY canon character involved or even referenced barring Celestia and Luna.
They most likely will play no role.
I'll see where it goes.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by IncoherentOrange Sun Oct 07, 2012 5:19 pm
Cool, Kipper. Hope that works out for ya. I can lend ideas, if you so wish.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Ironmonger Sun Oct 07, 2012 5:37 pm
*Notices that -1 brohoof* Seems legit. Last time I make a pun for you guys. 
@Kipper good luck with your fic. Switching from first-person to third person can trip up your thought process in my experience.
@Kipper good luck with your fic. Switching from first-person to third person can trip up your thought process in my experience.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Frost Sun Oct 07, 2012 5:43 pm
Any time I see a crappy, cliche HiE fic, I just think:
"Well, at least it's not the Conversion Bureau"
"Well, at least it's not the Conversion Bureau"
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Kippershy Sun Oct 07, 2012 5:45 pm
In case anyone is interested. It'll have its own thread once it [hopefully] gets accepted.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/55445/1/Of-the-skies-and-stars/To-the-stars...
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/55445/1/Of-the-skies-and-stars/To-the-stars...
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by IncoherentOrange Sun Oct 07, 2012 5:49 pm
You and I have similar ideas. Sorta. Did I just so happen to be writing a story somewhat like that at the same time you were, or did you absorb some ideas from me?
What a neat coincidence. Space opera is best opera.
What a neat coincidence. Space opera is best opera.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by RoboRed Sun Oct 07, 2012 5:52 pm
...I thought it was kinda funny...Ironmonger wrote:*Notices that -1 brohoof* Seems legit. Last time I make a pun for you guys.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Kippershy Sun Oct 07, 2012 5:54 pm
IncoherentOrange wrote:You and I have similar ideas. Sorta. Did I just so happen to be writing a story somewhat like that at the same time you were, or did you absorb some ideas from me?
What a neat coincidence. Space opera is best opera.
Completely coincidental! I swear!
I got the idea for it when I was writing this post about what kind of HiE fic I do / don't like.
Kippershy wrote:To be honest... the aspect of human in equestria itself doesn't bother me too much.
That
said though, I mean it on a very flat term (roll with me) in that I'm
saying human / equestria itself isn't the bane of my world.
Now,
like previously mentioned, what DOES give me issue is how often the HiE
fics go rolling around with the mane6 for any reason.
"Gotta save the day with Twilight and her friends!" Cliché as fuck and boring.
Twilight
being called by the princess to figure out (with her) what this strange
new creature is and where it may have come from? Not half as bad, but
still usually goes to shit with some save the day aspect.
Humans bringing war to Equestria... psh, again, not a fan of it.
A
human getting into Equestria by means of time travel or some such would
be interesting to me - say, be it because of The Doctor or something.
The
TARDIS lands in some small village (NOT ponyville) in Equestria...
friendship is formed between one of the humans and an O.C pony despite
the fact that all the others are extremely cautious about this new thing
arriving out of nowhere.
Because of this friendship....
You know what, I'm considering writing that now. Though, remove the doctor. I'll do it somehow else.
See, when I ramble about things, I give myself ideas.
It's the whole bit where I spoke about the TARDIS which gave me the idea to write what I did.
I'm like that. the smallest of things can turn to a major inspiration for me. Like this one guy keeps wanting me to write his characters into my story, I instantly manage to find way that they would work with my story without changing them too much, while still changing them enough not to be the unstoppable badass he likes to imagine them as.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Stringtheory Sun Oct 07, 2012 5:57 pm
haven't read the Conversion Bureau but from what I've heard it's pure Wish FulfillmentMister Frost wrote:Any time I see a crappy, cliche HiE fic, I just think:
"Well, at least it's not the Conversion Bureau"
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by IncoherentOrange Sun Oct 07, 2012 6:03 pm
That's cool, I read it and liked it. If you've read my sample, you see that Twilight does indeed appear in my new story, which is to be entitled Eclipse.
...Though there will be no human-pony interaction until chapter three, after two major "WTF?" moments involving some nasty things happening to the xenobiology team. It will not have any adventure/save the world stuff in it, though. Negotiation and exploration, more like.
Yes, spiels can give you ideas. I wanted to, for a time, write a story about a black and red alicorn OC complete with a stupidly-cool name. Then I'd write him as a complete klutz that couldn't fly or use magic at all, is completely socially-inept, and cannot do anything of note.
...Unfortunately I'm not very good at comedy.
@TCB Yep, twisted, misanthropic wish fulfillment.
...Though there will be no human-pony interaction until chapter three, after two major "WTF?" moments involving some nasty things happening to the xenobiology team. It will not have any adventure/save the world stuff in it, though. Negotiation and exploration, more like.
Yes, spiels can give you ideas. I wanted to, for a time, write a story about a black and red alicorn OC complete with a stupidly-cool name. Then I'd write him as a complete klutz that couldn't fly or use magic at all, is completely socially-inept, and cannot do anything of note.
...Unfortunately I'm not very good at comedy.
@TCB Yep, twisted, misanthropic wish fulfillment.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Ironmonger Sun Oct 07, 2012 6:05 pm
If I make someone laugh, even a little, then I've won. I'm like the chaos god of laughter.RoboRed wrote:...I thought it was kinda funny...Ironmonger wrote:*Notices that -1 brohoof* Seems legit. Last time I make a pun for you guys.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Stringtheory Sun Oct 07, 2012 6:06 pm
Pinkie as a Chaos god...my mind just exploded...Ironmonger wrote:If I make someone laugh, even a little, then I've won. I'm like the chaos god of laughter.RoboRed wrote:...I thought it was kinda funny...Ironmonger wrote:*Notices that -1 brohoof* Seems legit. Last time I make a pun for you guys.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Kippershy Sun Oct 07, 2012 6:06 pm
Ironmonger wrote:Might have to use Google Chrome to view
Damn this image makes me anxious to see my own picture of three alicorns by the Ask Fizzy mod.
She already drew the picture of Crimson/Cherry kissing, though she's got other pictures to do before getting round to my second one, I assume.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by IncoherentOrange Sun Oct 07, 2012 6:13 pm
stringtheory wrote:
Pinkie as a Chaos god...my mind just exploded...
We're done for. Game over man, game over!
Even worse might be a union of Tzeentch, Sheogorath, Pinkie Pie, Discord, and Deadpool.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Ironmonger Sun Oct 07, 2012 6:14 pm
Twilight as the chaos god of magic.stringtheory wrote:Pinkie as a Chaos god...my mind just exploded...Ironmonger wrote:If I make someone laugh, even a little, then I've won. I'm like the chaos god of laughter.RoboRed wrote:...I thought it was kinda funny...Ironmonger wrote:*Notices that -1 brohoof* Seems legit. Last time I make a pun for you guys.
@Alicorn pic
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by FeatherDust Sun Oct 07, 2012 6:16 pm
Cptadder wrote:Simple, apply a very rough bit of this to the detonation of the megaspells and you can use average population numbers to determine where exactly this band of "survivability as a ghoul" vs "Burn to death" vs "Die of radiation" lies. Ghoulification seems to be very conditional. Most people who get a massive dose of rads die as do most who get long term slow term rad dosage. However magical radiation seems to affect a great number (I'd guess as high as twenty percent) with mutation before death and the right set of circumstances leads to ghoulification rather than death to radiation.
Adder, I just discovered that everything you post, especially sciencey stuff, is now approximately 20% more believable because your avatar means, in my brain, it's Lab Coat Glory saying it.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Cptadder Sun Oct 07, 2012 6:32 pm
It's just a matter of Science after all! Any foal can understand Science!FeatherDust wrote:
Adder, I just discovered that everything you post, especially sciencey stuff, is now approximately 20% more believable because your avatar means, in my brain, it's Lab Coat Glory saying it.
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Stringtheory Sun Oct 07, 2012 6:41 pm
Cptadder wrote:It's just a matter of Science after all! Any foal can understand Science!FeatherDust wrote:
Adder, I just discovered that everything you post, especially sciencey stuff, is now approximately 20% more believable because your avatar means, in my brain, it's Lab Coat Glory saying it.
![[GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion - Page 3 PwmRY](https://i.imgur.com/pwmRY.png)
who is best science filly, Glory or Science Woona?
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by RoboRed Sun Oct 07, 2012 6:49 pm
You foul being...how dare you ask such a question!?
*crumples to ground, holding head and whimpering* I CAN'T DECIDE!!!
*crumples to ground, holding head and whimpering* I CAN'T DECIDE!!!
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
by Ironmonger Sun Oct 07, 2012 6:51 pm
Glory is best science pony.
Scotch:"But she's soooo boring!"
Toilet cutie mark.
Scotch:"..."
Thought so.
Scotch:"But she's soooo boring!"
Toilet cutie mark.
Scotch:"..."
Thought so.
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