Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion

[O. Hinds]

Thank you. :)

[Icy Shake]

So, since digging for things that FoE writers have "predicted" that ended up happening in the show is a time-honored tradition, in light of this week's episode . . .

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[O. Hinds]

Correction notification: we have changed in 75b an instance of Boo calling Discord her father; she was meant to call him her uncle, as usual.

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Correction notification: we have changed in 75b an instance of Boo calling Discord her father; she was meant to call him her uncle, as usual.

Discord: Blackjack never told you what happened to your father.
Boo: She told me enough! She told me I'm a clone trooper.
Discord: No. I am your father!
Boo: That's not true! That's impossible!
Discord: Search your feelings, you know it is true!
Boo: Feelings have nothing to do with it. In previous chapters I have always referred to you, and you have acknowledged yourself as, an uncle to me.
Discord: Oh bother. I always hate it when ponies don't go along with reenacting a movie scene.
Boo: Movie?

[O. Hinds]

Hah! :D

[O. Hinds]

Icy Shake, Triage's description came up again in some editing I was doing, and I've made some notes about it in the spreadsheet, just as a reminder; I hope you don't mind. We can remove the notes once her new colors (which I'm not sure what to call) are solidified and the old descriptions are corrected.
I also went ahead and put in Colonel Cupcake's updated colors.

[Icy Shake]

Hey, that's what it's there for. Here's the relevant editing stuff I could find on those topics, plus a few others.

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[O. Hinds]

@Icy Shake:
Ah, thank you very much.

regarding the bats:
...Did we not decide that hoofball used bats? Hm. Though you're right that baseball (and baseball bats) is in the original, and hoofball isn't...
...And the occurrences of "baseball bat" in PH actually outnumber those of "hoofball bat"...
Eh, yeah, I'd better make the change. Thanks for finding these!

I've updated Triage's colors in the spreadsheet.

’m glad the Prof isn’t a complete basket case.”

I don't think "Prof" should be capitalized


I’m glad the Prof isn’t a complete basket case.”

"Prof" shouldn't be capitalized

You appear to have listed that twice.

“How’re the Prof’s parts?”

I don't think "Prof" should be capitalized


“How’re the Prof’s parts?”

"Prof" shouldn't be capitalized

And again, with the same format. Curious.

[Icy Shake]

Yeah, that is weird. Sorry.

On the subject of the bats, there's also a bit from Hightower that kind of cut down on the ambiguity of what hoofball is:

Then a hoofball whizzed through the air and smashed her upside her face, deflecting to crash into the back of Rampage’s head. From there it rocketed straight at me. I raised my hooves, popped my fingers free, and caught the oval brown ball.

[O. Hinds]

No problem.

Aye, I mentioned that in the discussion last time, I think.  Thanks, though.

[Icy Shake]

My one weakness—remembering things for over a week!

[O. Hinds]

:)

[O. Hinds]

And the penultimate chapter, 76!

[CD]

First!

Okay, so that's not very insightful commentary. Let me just say I was looking forward to this in light of a whole bunch of other drama these last weeks.

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76:

[RoboRed]

OF HAPPENINGS

[Harmony Ltd.]

HOLY SHIT HYPE


Okay, just finished reading it. No commentary to provide at this time. I'm sure something witty will come to me tomorrow or later.

In the meantime, well...

Good job Somber. Good freaking job. I'm hyped for the ending you have in store.


And because I'm sure it was pretty much set-up so people would speculate on it...

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[Harmony Ltd.]

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[O. Hinds]

And because I'm sure it was pretty much set-up so people would speculate on it...

That was the idea, yes. :)

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[WavemasterRyx]

*nuzzles Somber and Hinds each just barely*

A whole lot more crying than I've done for a while... but it's a very solid chapter, definitely fitting for the first half of a finale.

Chapter 76 Commentary:

[O. Hinds]

Thank you.

[Evilgidgit]

And now, the end is near. And so we face the final curtain...

I'm both happy and sad Project Horizons is coming to end. It's been one heck of a rollercoaster ride of emotions, thrills, and some really wonderful writing and characters. I think it is actually better than Fallout Equestria in some respects. And to be honest, it is probably the best piece of fanfiction I've ever read.

[O. Hinds]

Thank you, Evilgidgit. :)

Also, the title and quote (though the latter isn't completely fixed yet) for the final chapter are up on the hub page. In case anyone needed more hype. :)

[WavemasterRyx]

Chapter 76 Commentary, Small addition...:

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[O. Hinds]

Chapter 76 Commentary, Small addition...:

Agreed. :)
(Except for the "any day" bit; it's good, yes, but there are too many unknown possibilities for me to currently feel confident saying that it is the absolute best out of all potential ones.)

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editing notes:

[O. Hinds]

I've made edits to correct two continuity issues.
In Chapter 60:

It wasn’t the clunkier Neighvarro style of armor nor the smoother lines of Thunderhead; this armor concealed every inch of their body, even the undersides of their wings.  The uniform black was broken by lines of purple.

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It wasn’t the clunkier Neighvarro style of armor nor the smoother lines of Thunderhead, and instead of a uniform black, it was mostly purple.

In Chapter 62 Part 2:

It was just too hard to tell a pony by the end of their muzzle and the underside of their wings.

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These (hopefully) fix two problems, the second of which concerns the color of Mare Do Well's armor and which I noticed while looking for instances of the first.
The first I noticed when checking a reference: GPE power armor, as far as I can tell, is fully enclosed. The reason for the confusion (and I'm afraid that, IIRC, that this being a problem in PH is due to a memory glitch on my part; I for this offer my apologies) is a passage in the original when the muzzle tips and wing undersides are left uncovered. Vector-Brony's images use this design, having inherited it, according to the documentation (found, among other places, here) from one Brisineo. In turn, Brisinio's design, as documented here, is based on the same description I was remembering. The problem is that that description, when I looked through the original just now, is of Rainbow Dash wearing one of Rarity's early prototypes and is the only description I found in the original of armor with those openings; what I did find were multiple descriptions of GPE armor being fully enclosed. I again apologize for the presence of this error. If you see any remaining instances of incorrectly described armor (including this design detail and the coloring of Mare Do Well's), please let me know. Thank you.

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Ah, thank you.

[MSCA]

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