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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
Reposting here so that Somber will see it.
WovenTales wrote:I definitely agree with that. Kkat (there are a lot of "Kat"s around) did manage to join the worlds of Fallout and MLP much better than anyone imagined was possible, but the story itself isn't as good. Its the recursive fanfiction that really makes Fo:E worth the read; as good as PH, MN7, and All that Remains are, they all need knowledge of the war and the wasteland. PH could probably stand on its own, but a lot of the details of the ministries (and the Stable Dweller jokes) would have to be inferred, and it helps to know Filly and Red Eye's roles in Equestria when following Murky. All that Remains is probably the most easily detachable, but even so, it's written to explore the other side and liking the zebras is much more meaningful when we know the war. "The best thing about Fo:E is that it allows you to read these other, completely amazing stories" isn't much praise (and is perhaps not giving it quite enough credit), but as much as I enjoyed the original (and the second reading I'm giving it), that's pretty much how I feel.swicked wrote:...good. It isn't that good, particularly on its own.Valikdu wrote:I've found something really interesting.
This is a liveblog on TVTropes which is basically a Let's Read for the original FoE. The author is a (very) caustic critic, but raises a lot of valid points.
What it really sells is a world; the rest is average to sub-par.
That's part of the reason I don't quite get people complaining about how Somber changes the backstory. It might have been one of the strongest parts of Fo:E, but there's still room for improvement. What PH tells us about the war turns it from a terrible (but somewhat abstract) event to a tragedy. Kkat gave us war; Somber makes us part of it. Ponies aren't trying their best and failing, they're trying their best at something ultimately worthless or unproductive. I remember tearing up a couple times in Fo:E at a character's death (Rarity, Zecora) or at a particularly well-described ruin (Ponyville, I think), to name a few, but I never had the same sense of crushing inevitability that PH gave me a couple times (most notably during the Littlehorn dream). Besides, how is tweaking a few details of the war era so much worse than, for example, saying that Fluttershy was banging Cloud Kicker during flight camp?
Maybe not the best time to say it, but it's late and we're already on the subject of annoying complaints about PH, so what the heck. Why do people insist on saying it's too long, or too slow, or not focused enough on the main storyline? It's not a novel, and I'd be surprised if it was ever intended to be. It's a serial, and you can't try to force it into a novel. Sure you can still make the same complaints, but they don't have the same weight. A serial is supposed to be long, and PH is just able to fill a large number of issues without (I guess arguably) artificially postponing the plot. Likewise, it's not supposed to be telling the story of EC-1101 to Project horizons from Point A to Point D, taking into account a few intermediate stages to slightly hide the linearity, plus three or four sidequests. It's a character piece that explores Blackjack and the wasteland, using EC-1101 to keep from feeling completely directionless but never pulling it before the main focus. If nothing else, it should be compared to something with a similar aim, rather than the standard modern fantasy template.
So that's a unnecessary rant over. Sorry. The fact that I wrote the entire thing probably means I should have been asleep a while ago. Good night/morning/whenever!
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Re: [GRIMDARK] Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons Discussion
Wow. Thanks for sharing that. Now I wonder what Pannic would make of PH... and I'm scared to ask.
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swicked wrote:Pannic?
Author of that Liveblog
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Yeah, we have, but there's a lot of people in other places that don't get that, and the rant was directed at them rather than anyone here. It just seems that they are sometimes able to recognize that PH isn't following the standard story, but rather than (at least trying to) like it for what it is, they condemn it for being original. Sorry, just find that really annoying. Plus I get rather wordy when I'm tired.
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Embrace your verbosity... give in to the loquacious side!WovenTales wrote:Yeah, we have, but there's a lot of people in other places that don't get that, and the rant was directed at them rather than anyone here. It just seems that they are sometimes able to recognize that PH isn't following the standard story, but rather than (at least trying to) like it for what it is, they condemn it for being original. Sorry, just find that really annoying. Plus I get rather wordy when I'm tired.
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I, for one, really enjoy BJ and co.'s side adventures.
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ARoundCorner wrote:Saw Batman... thought of Project Horizens...
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The question I think is : how would you take negative criticism if the arguments were to be thought out and not superficial ?Somber wrote:Wow. Thanks for sharing that. Now I wonder what Pannic would make of PH... and I'm scared to ask.
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I love criticism. Criticism is how writers grow. The only one criticism I don't need is that the story is too long. Believe me, that one I know.
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I suppose so, yes. :D
Well then, maybe you could ask him to have an eye on your fic once he's done with FoE ? It would be interesting to have a perspective from outside the FoE "fandom".
Well then, maybe you could ask him to have an eye on your fic once he's done with FoE ? It would be interesting to have a perspective from outside the FoE "fandom".
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He's done with FoE now. The newest chapters are him reading other fics.
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He seems to have a few regular commentators, at least. From what I can tell, he seems quite perceptive. I've just about read the whole liveblog
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He's actually reading Pink Eyes and Murky N7 in some of the newer entries. He likes them so far.
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Correction: he didn't find anything awful about the characters or narrative over the first two chapters. He hadn't read past that yet.
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Pink Eyes is the real memey one right?
One of my criticisms of PH is that it's too short. I want it to go on forever and ever amen.
One of my criticisms of PH is that it's too short. I want it to go on forever and ever amen.
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Actually, here's everything that he wrote about Pink Eyes:
*shrug*
Well, I don't see anything disqualifying.
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- Link to the blog post: http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/lb_i.php?lb_id=13398853770B89940100&i_id=13701036520I52320400&p=59Pannic wrote:Here We Go Again
So, since I have nothing better to do, let's look at a Fallout: Equestria sidefic. But which one? I could talk about Murky Number Seven. I could spend a lot of time talking about why I like it, but I’ll save that for later.
Today's story is Pink Eyes, which, like the original and Murky Number Seven, is one of the "Big Five" of Fallout: Equestria fics, with the other two being Project Horizons and Heroes. Pink Eyes, however, stands unique on account of the fact that of the major side-fics, it's actually finished.
Chapters aren't as long as Murky Number Seven. Alright, here we go.
We start off in Canterlot with the bombs smashing against the shield. Ponies are lined up for an air wagon, desperate to get out of the city. One mare panics and is shot down by a guard.
A unicorn medical officer, meanwhile, notices a little filly standing all by her lonesome. This little filly is Puppysmiles, our protagonist, and she's waiting for her mother. We get a look at the medical officer's thoughts... is she the POV character for this part? In any case, she drops a line in her thoughts about the war killing hope. Subtle statement of the theme there.
The medical officer slips her into a radsuit. Puppysmiles thinks it's super-cool, like she's in a space-suit. And it occurs to me that I'm not sure whether her personality is childlike innocence or if she's just a Cloud Cuckoolander. Maybe both. Either way, she makes a decent first impression. She's fun. She's not particularly annoying. So I guess she qualifies as likable.
Then the prose sort of shifts to describing things from Puppy's POV, and she's having a super duper great time, completely oblivious to the grave seriousness of everything that's happening.
So, with her super-duper new suit, she heads on home. However, when she goes to the fridge, she finds that she can't take off her helmet. And then it turns out that the suit can talk. It's got a computer program with a voice that gives status updates and whatnot. Puppysmiles is highly surprised and a little confused. But the medical diagnostic system comes online just as she hears screams coming from outside. The Pink Cloud is doing its thing.
Man. Now I'm reminded of chapter 37, which was basically Dead Money minus anything that anyone actually liked about Dead Money.
No, bad Pannic.
Anyway, the Pink Cloud and the radiation starts seeping into the building, and the suit starts spamming her with Med-X and RadAway, over and over again. The suit warns her to leave, but she's still waiting for her mommy...
Wow. I almost felt something. Better see a doctor to make sure there isn't something wrong there.
And then Puppysmiles succumbs to the toxic cloud. And there she lies for two hundred years...
And the story has what appears to be a little gimmick where it keeps track of the days and the time.
Another thing I notice is that the story is basically a big wall of text. In fanfiction it’s traditional to use a full space between paragraphs, while in “legit” literature you indent the paragraphs. This story does neither. Thankfully it’s still readable - the author does hit “Enter” before each paragraph, so it’s not like I’m getting lost. It’s just weird is all.
As for the prose, there really isn’t anything to say. It’s very straightforward and to the point, more or less. Not that I’m expecting the author to be weaving words like F Patrick Fitzgerald - English isn’t their first language. That’d just be unreasonable.
Anyway, Puppysmiles wakes up and the first thing she does is call for her mom.
The suit's computer program also comes online, and Puppysmiles tries talking with it. Of course, its functionalities don't give her completely what she wants, and she doesn't understand it. For example, it reads her vitals and finds that she's actually dead. And when she asks the voice where her mom is, it proceeds to give her directions to the nearest Ministry of Morale hub outside of Canterlot.
So Puppysmiles sets off down the road singing “Warning Wrap-Up” as the suit talks about how it’s out of medical supplies and it’s lost all emergency channels.
Puppysmiles calls the suit’s program “Mister Voice” and tries to talk with it, though being that it’s a simple computer program with no personality or emotions, that doesn’t really work out. But I don’t think she notices. Despite this, Mister Voice manages to have infinitely more character than Xenith.
She comes across a ghoul, which Mister Voice designates as Hostile. And she hears it as “Horse-Tile.”
Puppysmiles, despite her general obliviousness, suspects something is wrong with her, and asks Mister Voice if she’s sick. And then she doesn’t know the difference between “deceased” and “diseased.”
So she exits Canterlot and gets attacked by some raiders. They puncture her suit and one of them gets a faceful of pink cloud. The results are predictable. Quite gory. And a bit funny how a face-melting is described as being like ice cream melting on a hot summer day.
Wacky comedy, sads, horrific gore - the tone of this piece is all over the place. Mood whiplash galore, but I guess that’s really befitting of the black comedy. Thankfully that doesn’t really bother me too much - I enjoy some good whiplash. It can be fun.
So she continues her sojourn and encounters a Spritebot, having a brief conversation with Watcher. She explains her predicament and what happened to her and how she’s looking for her mom, but Watcher just doesn’t have the heart to tell her the truth.
Oh hey, the fic gets her SPECIAL loadout. And the footnote asks if monsters gain levels.
So the prose is kinda pedestrian. That isn’t really important. What’s important is the characters. And Puppysmiles is, admittedly, endearing. The story also gives her a very simple, straightforward goal - look for her mother. Though I imagine that’s something of a foregone conclusion. To make it simple, I will ask three questions:
Do I care?
Am I interested?
Am I entertained?
If the answer to any of these questions is “yes,” then whoop-de-doo, I have a reason to keep reading. Do I care? Not sure. Foregone conclusion in regards to the main question diminishes that investment. Interested? Well, it’s a unique premise. Am I entertained? Yes.
So chapter 1 of Pink Eyes is a success.
//====================On the road with a kid. Oh boy.
You know, I've found a couple terrible Harry Potter fics that I could make fun of. There's The Girl Who Lived, which is an attempt at rewriting the books except it's hilariously terrible, and The Last War, a shipfic which horrendously derails the characters. Some potential. Haven't looked into any of that Sweeney Todd stuff except for something I've seen sporked. Been kinda lazy there. Been kinda lazy in general. But let's get on with this Pink Eyes stuff.
Holy shit, the author learned to space and indent paragraphs. Gold star!
Slight tense confusion.
>>> First of all, if you were to survive a direct hit from a balefire spell, you'll probably to live long enough to die of thirst inside the suit.
But then, this guy's English is better than my Italian. Thankfully all the Italian I have to do is pre-written and notated.
So Puppysmiles sets off on the road and comes across a couple of ruffians who call themselves the Redtrotters. Of course, they're raiders and they murder her before trying to loot. Though unlike the raiders in Canterlot, they have the sense to back away from the pink cloud leaking out of her suit and thus don't die horribly.
However, the suit magically repairs the breach and Puppysmiles comes to again. Yay.
The suit informs her of her current objectives, modeled after what she's stated. One, fine mom. Two, get rid of space suit. Three, confront and/or avoid Mister Horse Tile. Four, find Redtrotters.
Oh, goodie, we're getting our plot points lined up. Not sure how Horse Tile is supposed to come up again, given he's a ghoul back in Canterlot. Mister Voice tells her how her inventory system works.
>>> Loading instructions. Selecting easy version for foals and Derpy.
Funny.
Anyway, she trots right into the Redtrotters' camp. I do find the scenario funny. We've got a band of hardened gangers making threats at a kid in a spacesuit who is unaware of any danger, and not really in a whole lot of danger because she's a zombie with regenerating powers.
They take something from her and give her a pass, slightly confused about the whole deal, and she goes along her way.
She finds the Ministry of Morale location and prances in, hoping to find her mom. She doesn't find one, however, but she finds a Pinkbot that invites her to a party. And there she finds another guest, a trapped filly who's giggling due to nitrous oxide.
Oh boy, we are taking a turn for the darker.
Puppysmiles makes an effort to free the other filly, but the Pinkbot won't let them leave without an adult's permission. Puppysmiles, however, grabs a rock and starts smashing the robot, angrily demanding to know where her mom is.
Then the robot explodes, and the turrets turn on her. Big explosions, and the barn collapses, burying her alive. Well... burying her undead...
Sheeeeesh, are the turrets set to perforate anyone who attacks the robots? What happens if it's just a rambunctious kid? Gonna perforate a rowdy colt?
She recovers and argues with Mister Voice, who doesn't seem to be able to grasp that she wants to find her mother. Of course, with that Ministry of Morale hub destroyed, Mister Voice just marks the location of the next one.
She runs into Watcher again, who wishes her well, and she sets off on the road again.
However, the two Redtrotters who tried to kill her the other day catch up with her and demand to know how she isn't dead. Also, we learn that the filly Puppysmiles saved was named Ridge Racer.
RIIIIIIII-
No. That stopped being funny seven years ago.
Anyway, they decide she's retarded, one of them, Rattling Bones, gives her a pass to Salt Cube City and thanks her for rescuing her sister from the crazy Pinkbot.
So Puppysmiles asks if Mister Voice is gonna go away once they find mom. Mister Voice replies that the suit's fused to her, so that's a no-go. Puppysmiles decides that's okay for now, and at least Mister Voice finds her requests predictable with 95% accuracy.
Well, that was charming.
*shrug*
Well, I don't see anything disqualifying.
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I forgot that the first few chapters of Pink Eyes were fun. Stupid, but fun. (Is that joke still funny?)
I think I stopped reading around when Puppysmiles got semi-possessed by the spirit of Nightmare Moon.
I think I stopped reading around when Puppysmiles got semi-possessed by the spirit of Nightmare Moon.
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I read Pink Eyes from beginning to end and I thought it was really fun and unique to see the world of Fallout Equestria from the eyes of a whatever-age-Puppysmiles-is-year-old.
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I admit that Pink Eye isn't the strongest story in the Fallout Universe, but it's good for what it is. I can't remember where I heard it but some people see Pink Eye like a legend of events that did happen but some details have gotten distorted over time.
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Caoimhe wrote:Pink Eyes is the real memey one right?
One of my criticisms of PH is that it's too short. I want it to go on forever and ever amen.
Glory be to the Somber, and to the Hoof, and to the Star Maiden, as it was in '11, is now, and ever shall be, Project without end. Amen.
On a more serious note, Pink Eyes was often pretty fun, and even had some (from what I remember) pretty decent side characters. The major problem I had with it, though, was that to date it still has (IMO, natch) the absolute worst version of the Nightmare I've seen in fanfic.
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P-21: Hey, Blackjack, I was just-- Uh... I'm sorry, are you...?
BJ: Pissing on my high-pressure ammo? Yeah.
P-21: Any particular reason why?
BJ: *big grin* I call it "9mm +P Plus Pee"!
BJ: Pissing on my high-pressure ammo? Yeah.
P-21: Any particular reason why?
BJ: *big grin* I call it "9mm +P Plus Pee"!
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I noticed a little mistake when I was looking back at the description of Folly in Ch. 5.
Should be "but it had clearly been".It loaded from a breech like a break action shotgun, but clearly it’d been engineered for precision.
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Ugh. Did that happen?Derpmind wrote:I forgot that the first few chapters of Pink Eyes were fun. Stupid, but fun. (Is that joke still funny?)
I think I stopped reading around when Puppysmiles got semi-possessed by the spirit of Nightmare Moon.
I wallbanger'd it at the fight at the laughing gas farm when she destroyed a killer robot by headbutting it until it died.
Understand: I don't actually have a problem with a character headbutting a killer robot to death (though it strikes me as a fairly stupid concept), but this is a character who is supposed to be cute and innocent, and she just immediately snaps into a killer death machine for no apparent reason.
It makes it simply impossible to accept when she's supposedly back to being blithely innocent about violence on the next page.
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Sorry, but why? As far as I can tell, those two are equivalent in meaning and equally valid.SilentCarto wrote:
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I noticed a little mistake when I was looking back at the description of Folly in Ch. 5.Should be "but it had clearly been".It loaded from a breech like a break action shotgun, but clearly it’d been engineered for precision.
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I giggled because it's true...swicked wrote:He likes Pink Eyes?
Yeah, no, I don't think I will be reading his blog...
The trouble is, she doesn't act like an anything-year-old. Children aren't stupid; they're ignorant. If you want to approximate a child's behavior, imagine what a monkey would do, and you're 90% of the way there. Puppysmiles acts like almost the complete inverse of that -- rather than fearing the unknown and being traumatized by the loss of everything she's considered familiar and permanent, or even getting caught up in the excitement of exploring a brand-new world without rules or authority figures, she just trots along, blithely cheerful about all the horror and obvious danger around her, forcing the world to fit into her immutable worldview.Evilgidgit wrote:I read Pink Eyes from beginning to end and I thought it was really fun and unique to see the world of Fallout Equestria from the eyes of a whatever-age-Puppysmiles-is-year-old.
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http://faculty.washington.edu/marynell/grammar/AdverbPl.htmlO. Hinds wrote:Sorry, but why? As far as I can tell, those two are equivalent in meaning and equally valid.
Adverbs of certaintly, such as "clearly", go after state of being verbs and before other verbs. "Had been" becomes "had clearly been". (In this case, it doesn't go between "been" and "engineered" because it hasn't been "engineered" in a "clear" way, it is "clear" that it has "been engineered".)
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SilentCarto wrote:I giggled because it's true...swicked wrote:He likes Pink Eyes?
Yeah, no, I don't think I will be reading his blog...
I shouldn't have written that...
He doesn't *like Pink Eyes in its entirety*, he'd just haven't found any notable serious faults yet. I've put full quotes from the blog posts on PE into a post above.
Again, he'd just read the two first chapters and has apparently not seen any other analyses previously. Can't come to a reasonable conclusion about the entire thing based on just this.
His full examination of the original is, in my view, really valuable.
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SilentCarto wrote:I noticed a little mistake when I was looking back at the description of Folly in Ch. 5.Should be "but it had clearly been".It loaded from a breech like a break action shotgun, but clearly it’d been engineered for precision.
I think the part in question is close enough to mental dialogue to be a valid use.
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SilentCarto wrote:http://faculty.washington.edu/marynell/grammar/AdverbPl.htmlO. Hinds wrote:Sorry, but why? As far as I can tell, those two are equivalent in meaning and equally valid.
Adverbs of certaintly, such as "clearly", go after state of being verbs and before other verbs. "Had been" becomes "had clearly been". (In this case, it doesn't go between "been" and "engineered" because it hasn't been "engineered" in a "clear" way, it is "clear" that it has "been engineered".)
This seems like a case where Blackjack may be narrating in a more colloquial voice, more like speech than writing (or, what Derpmind said). However, even that is ignoring that, even adjectives of certainty other than "surely," "maybe," and "perhaps" can begin sentences, if often with a comma, i.e. "Undoubtedly, this is a grammatical sentence—or one that at least follows a structure common in speech." In context, the following would surely work as a standalone sentence: Clearly, it'd been engineered for precision.
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Wow, Pannic is so negative about everything on his blog. His blog is just a page of negativity followed by a paragraph of cynicism with more negativity.
Is the entire purpose of his liveblog to trash other people's work...?
Here's a quote from page 17 of his blog.
"After a little thought, I might not be continuing The Ballad of Twilight Sparkle on this liveblog. It seems the story might not really suck, and after viewing so much fucking awful Sonic crossover shipping art (why does this exist?) Twixie seems rather benign in comparison."
So Pannic is basically saying that he won't continue his reading of a Fanfic because it "might not really suck"?
Then again... the title of his liveblog is "Pannic Reads Stuff He Hates," but if he really hated it that much... how in god's name did he read all 45 chapters of FoE. I really liked it, but it still took me a long time to get through it all. (I found FoE after it was completed)
Either he really does like it... or he really likes putting people down... or he just has balls of steel.
Is the entire purpose of his liveblog to trash other people's work...?
Here's a quote from page 17 of his blog.
"After a little thought, I might not be continuing The Ballad of Twilight Sparkle on this liveblog. It seems the story might not really suck, and after viewing so much fucking awful Sonic crossover shipping art (why does this exist?) Twixie seems rather benign in comparison."
So Pannic is basically saying that he won't continue his reading of a Fanfic because it "might not really suck"?
Then again... the title of his liveblog is "Pannic Reads Stuff He Hates," but if he really hated it that much... how in god's name did he read all 45 chapters of FoE. I really liked it, but it still took me a long time to get through it all. (I found FoE after it was completed)
Either he really does like it... or he really likes putting people down... or he just has balls of steel.
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Guess I'm the odd man out, because I treat fanfiction like I treat food.
And I am not a skinny man.
And I am not a skinny man.
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