Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
Well...it's at least better, than what I could do with paint :D
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
At least it looks like a pony, better than anything I could draw.
Maybe you should stick to writing, you are much better at that, in any case.
Maybe you should stick to writing, you are much better at that, in any case.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
ketchup504 wrote:At least it looks like a pony, better than anything I could draw.
Maybe you should stick to writing, you are much better at that, in any case.
Yeah, I really only did it to say: Here, this is why I don't draw (apart from the occasional background scene... like
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Which the above picture needs fixing itself, too. Anyway - yeah. I tell people I'm a writer not a drawer, but got told to try drawing anyway.
swicked wrote:Haha, that's cute! Nice work :)
Hah, thanks! =3 I'm glad it's at least cute, I kind've thought so myself.
edit: and when you click on it on my tumblr page, it takes another effect (like it showed on GIMP) and looks awesome in another way
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
I'm in need of one person who doesn't mind spoilers. I'm going to be putting this up on FIMfic too once it loads, but yeah.
One person is required to give a second opinion on a matter quite big. This spoiler is one of the biggest events of the story, and in essence, really needs someone who has read up to the current point to truly appreciate every aspect of the issue.
Thank you.
One person is required to give a second opinion on a matter quite big. This spoiler is one of the biggest events of the story, and in essence, really needs someone who has read up to the current point to truly appreciate every aspect of the issue.
Thank you.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
I wouldn't mind, where will it be? I'm not too great with feedback, though.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
Where? as in, where to talk to you or where in story?
In story, it revolves around Coltchester, a specific part of Coltchester.
In story, it revolves around Coltchester, a specific part of Coltchester.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
Where can I read it is what I meant. Sorry.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
Absolutely wonderful reviews, thank you.
I'll respond on your points as soon as I'm back from work, explain some little things and note down anything I need to change in-story to make more sense.
Once again, thank you ever so much, you're amazing for this :)
I'll respond on your points as soon as I'm back from work, explain some little things and note down anything I need to change in-story to make more sense.
Once again, thank you ever so much, you're amazing for this :)
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
swicked wrote:
Starting again with chapter ten.
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Starting with a song? I don't recognize it...
She could only be found in cleaner environments? Is she stable?
And hmm... cute. I wonder if my views on cute are well-enough known by now?
...wow,
the foal just pulled a feather out? You remember that episode when
Rainbowdash was looking for a pet? She got a one (or maybe more than
one) feather stuck under a rock and she absolutely couldn't pull away
from it. Not like it's a big issue... I'm just being chatty.
A necklace for a baby. Huh......I
had never known what having a child was like, but within these few
moments, I understood why everypony who was anything decent of a parent
had said it was something truly special.It'd be funny if he was bi and had thisThat
was when I saw what truly made my heart soar, and what inspired me to
grab Stitch right there and give her the most impassioned kiss I could
muster as she blushed.
reaction every time someone did something incredibly nice for him :P
At the same time I think it'd be funny if he went for a kiss and got judo-ed XDTemptation struck me all over as I felt my package harden.Saddlebags, I think.Double Stitch made her way over to the table and pulled the sewing kit out of her pocketsIt’s true! :oIt
was painfully obvious she had a crush on me, and to be fair, what pony
didn't around here? Mares and bucks alike wanted to be with me because I
was exotic and had power.
I
don't get this whole brahmin-goddess thing. Why would she allow a being
that disturbs her children continue to exist? I just don't get this...
"Here's
my offer. I invest one hundred and fifty caps and pay one hundred caps
for six grenades. You'll be getting one hundred and sixty caps 'free'
this way"
"In the mean time, we will accept ninety caps for six grenades, and will talk about the extra one hundred and sixty."
???
I wonder how far ahead these brahmin were after giving the 30% discount and selling all that ammo.What, did he take a census? XDAround
here, only five of the twenty of us sent were upset over the news. Ten
didn't really care either way. Myself and four others though? We
cheered. It's been too long since someone beat her, and never has anyone
gone to the extent you did."
By
the way, after the fight I personally would have found it funny of
Crimson's mom then had Sunburn executed for threatening the life of the
soon-to-be heir to the overmare throne :PAre you sure you don't mean demons? IsNot
all ghouls are daemons
this an english spelling thing? Because daemons aren't evil... they're
more neutral, even helpful. Which is why the term is used in software
for a program that helps run your computer but isn't visible.Dude, you're not a"Thus
is why you were chosen, Crimson. Too many leaders send their minions
without trying themselves. Too many do not understand the hardships of
those at the bottom. You put yourself at risk for the betterment of
others."
I looked into her eyes, amazed by what she had said. I
wasn't sure if I should've felt, this wasn't something I was doing for
glory.
Drawing a deep breath, I let out a following sigh. She was
right, too many leaders did just allow those under them to go into the
dangerous situations without having any understanding of the risks
themselves, I couldn't be one of those leaders.
leader yet. You're a soon-to-be-leader. And she's insulting your mom.
Not cool.Come on, it's not like she suddenly kissed youIn
a surprising act of generosity and kindness, Eos levitated me over to
the sofa where she sat and laid my head on her side. I felt my cheeks
burning like a wildfire under the sudden comforting touch and unexpected
intimacy.
passionately out of nowhere or anything...
Project Horizons stuff about ghouls I already knoooooooow.
Oh, and pretty words for Cherry. Huh.
...then switch to Cherry for the reading.
Romance is not my fort, eh?
End
of chapter. A talkative one. Play with baby, flirt with mare, trade
with bramin, gloat with soldier, learn from alicorn, write to mate. It
was all a bit filler-y. Not bad, but... I'm not sure what's been
accomplished in this chapter. But whatevs.
swicked wrote:
Be patient and tough; someday this pain will be useful to you.
Eh... one always hopes pain has a purpose. Most pain is pointless, though.
And experiencing pain due to having to experience it later is... eh.
(Oh, and chapter eleven now)
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Curves around her face. I don't get it....a
beautiful warmth of kindness radiating from the curves around her
face.Crimson: "Okay, yes, II
too raised up and stroked him from head to tail a few times with my
wing, doing my best to show him that I was friendly despite being the
cause of his life changing drastically.
killed your brothers and sisters, your parents and friends, everyone you
ever cared about, and would kill you too if Cherry hadn't asked me not
to... but does that really mean we can't be friends?"
Radbit: >:|
Crimson: "Okay, fine, if you HAVE to hold a grudge..."
Maisy was in the hotel room? How did she fit?
My the way, Macy is the name of my cat. I rather enjoy this choice of name.
...I
am a bit confused about her intelligence, though. Later on she is
embarassed when Crimson brings up that he saw her mating. Is she even an
animal, then? Why call her a pet?Lemme rewrite this a"You've
got one choice now." I began in my cold, heavy tone. "You get back on
the floor, or you get back on the floor. How you go about that is up to
you, if it's in a bloody mess, so be it."
bit:
Crimson: "You have two choices. Get back on the ground, or get back on the ground."
Mare: "Okay, ok-"
Crimson: "How you go about that is up to you."
Mare: "I got it, either willingly or you-"
Crimson: "If it's in a bloody mess, so be it."
Mare: "I understood you the first ti-!"
Crimson: "Meaning I'd shoot you, and then you'd lie down because you'd be dead."
Mare: "Look, I got it, would you stop interrup-!"
Crimson: "The other option is to lay down willingly, so that I then wouldn't have shot you."
Mare: *looks at Cherry* "Can he not hear me or someth-"
Crimson: "Though I guess that would technically be the first option, since being shot is the second."
Cherry: *sigh* "He's just in a thing right now. Give him a bit, he'll finish soon enough."
Crimson. "Regardless, I'm saying is..."...defending yourself isn't justice. Justice is"Cherry,
keep that. I want you to hold onto that knife and remember... justice.
Justice is what these ponies have just received - not
murder.
impartial. Justice is cold. Justice is a quick shot of poison months to
years after the crime that made the shot "neccessary". Defending
yourself, in the heat of the moment, blowing off the head of someone who
is actively attacking you... that's just that. Defending yourself.
You're not judge dread.
In any case, nice job with the consequences of a fight.
That
mare asking you to track down the other mare... I dunno. Kinda shady...
might just have wanted Crimson to split up with Cherry. Who did Maisy
stick with?Maaaaaath.Twenty caps and your promise that you'll not hand me in to her and I'll patch it right now."
I stared in utter shock but nodded, taking twenty five caps out and handing them to her.
Ooooo,
crap. THOSE foals. Right. Well, nice how Chance never had a name. I
guess that indicates she never had any godparents, and this foalsitter
is pretty bad for never having named her anything.
Oh, there's Maisy. Just still skulking and sulking.
Crimson: Oh, look! An old, grumpy lady! Let's smash her face in!Four
Ridges truly was a place of prosperity where even the poorest of ponies
had somewhere to call their own and the ability for basic things like
food and water, if not luxuries and entertainment.Hint hint, Crimson. If they took EVERYONE in, how"Four
Ridges? You're kidding me right? They wouldn't let us in, we don't have
the caps, even if it doesn't need anything like Tenpony Tower
does!"
would EVERYONE have a home, enough food and water, and perhaps more?
Methinks you're not as aware of what goes on in your empire as you
think...And for a price no"Nope,
not my work. No we don't have any though. The mare who I was sent to
chase did it for me, part of our agreement and discussion for me letting
her go once I'd managed to catch her."
steeper than her own head!Foreshadowing much?There
was no way I was going to be able to bring it back to the table now
unless something truly horrible happened.
Before either of us could react the bright yellow mare had already
began to use her magic to gently brush my testicles and coax my already
tempted member out from its sheath. I pulled back in shock but found her
pulling softly on my penis, encouraging it to expand with strokes of
magic brushing against it.
These entirely unarmored and barely equipped zebra legeoneers are absurd...Oh no! What a nightmare!The
unharmed one had kept his distance the entire time but now he had
climbed up atop of some scrap that littered the landscape and threatened
to jump down atop of us.It flew THROUGH it? Gezz, those zebraThe
sensation I felt was beyond that of pain. The sensation of the spear as
it pierced through the soft tissue of my wings burnt my whole left
side, bringing my crashing down to the ground in a heap of metal and
pony below.
My screaming multiplied by my helmet, I couldn't feel
anything other then the complete and utter agony of where there was now a
jagged hole in my wing.
hurl things hard. Spears usually just stick into stuff... I dunno how
much it would have mattered if it HAD struck bone, though. Project
Horizons canon is that the wings are crazy strong, right? Like...
stronger than any of the other limbs.
Three of them dropped dead as they walked, her bullet going straight through
each of their heads as they marched in line, one by one their brains
splattering the one behind until the bullet caught inside the skull of
the third.
These zebra were too dumb to live, anyway.And, luckily, don't seem quite atIt
looked like things were going to be okay for us as Maisy seemed to be
able to ignore their hoof to hoof attacks with stunning
endurance.
punching-through-steel level zebra martial arts.Quite the bad day to be a zebra. The"With
a cry of horror and anger mixed together, the zebras charged." "With
little effort, almost half their entire force as on the floor with one
gigantic swipe, the zebras in absolute confusion as to what was
happening." "A loud bang rang through and the zebras all stared at me in
shock, apparently executing your foe in the middle of a battleground
was some kind of war crime." "A cheer from his followers lifted my
spirits as I saw the alarm and shock in the zebra's faces." "The
remaining zebra force ran, screaming for their lives as their numbers
dwindled from many to few."
little guys were shocked no less than five times in maybe five minutes.D'aww, t'weren't nothin' special...The
combat in this chapter has been highly influenced by Swicked from
Cloudsville - a friend of mine and fellow member of the Project Horizons
Comment Crew. Thanks for the insight on how to make it
better!
Good
chapter! New enemy, elaboration on characters, closing of plot threads,
all that good stuff. Noice jorb :P
===first chapter review===
This is the song the lyrics are from.
It's healed me and gotten me through a few bad times, all of the Frou Frou stuff has really.
Here's a live version of the singer doing it solo.
(The live version is just as beautiful, if not slightly more-so in a weird way. Both are absolutely astounding though.)
As for the feather part, I completely ignored the canon of that episode and allowed for it to work differently in my story, going for the more realistic approach of feathers being reasonably stuck in, but able to be pulled out with enough force. A pegasus' wings are indeed superior in toughness, but to me, they've still got some fleshy/weak parts after the bones and feathers, in small quantities, are generally weak enough to be picked out too.
Remember - it's also canon that baby unicorns have extremely powerful magic, thus allowing Cherished enough force to yank a feather out if I go by the headcanon of they can be pulled out.
Personally I viewed it [the episode] not as her feathers alone getting caught, but a part of her wing itself was caught under the rock too, thus explaining why she couldn't just pull the feathers out.
I know you say it's not a big issue, I just wanted to give you my thought process on the matter to explain.
And yes, a necklace for her. Crimson's father gave him his armour because when he stopped being a caravan guard and settled down with his mother at Four Ridges, he no longer had use for it. So it's a tradition for Crimson to hand down something personal.
DON'T YOU LOOK AT ME LIKE THAT. I KNOW THE TRUTH ABOUT YOU.
You just don't like to view yourself as embracing it is all.
-pokes tongue out-
Pockets because she's wearing utility barding - sorry for not detailing that. Saddlebags are more for a long journey or if you've got lots of tools and such to deal with, but for a small set of tools, pockets on a ulitity barding wil do.
I'll hand it to you, you make a very good point with the brahmin. I'll probably change it to 10% or something. As for how far ahead they can get from it, its just enough investment to allow them some slightly higher quality/quantity goods, allowing a chain reaction of profit.
So yeah, I'll reduce that down to 10% now you got me thinking about it.
As for why the godess lets them live? I never really put too much thought into that one, admittedly. I'll definitely open that up as a thread to be resolved, though. Had some ideas while at work today over the matter, even.
Heh, wasn't too much of a census as so much as noticing who reacted with what.
Though you did make me laugh with that, thanks.
Daemon and demon to me, are one in the same. Don't know if that's me being English and spelling paedophile the way I do over pedophile or if it is just that I'm wrong here. I'll go check now to be sure for you.
...Nope, turns out that I am okay with using the term daemon. A daemon can be good, neutral or evil, while a demon is more strict in being evil. Even still, they hold the same sort've meaning and daemon is just the ancient greek way of writing it.
So I was right, they are practically one in the same.
Oh, isn't he a leader? Does he not already lead his expedition from Four Ridges? He takes the reigns and leads them out, being guided by those who know the route but still making the big decisions.
- Something of a spoiler, but not a full on spoiler:
- True, he isn't the leader of Four Ridges, but you forget that all Eos can tell when she reads his mind is misty images --- she would have to have a lot of focus to know exactly what he is and isn't, something she's not had the chance to get yet.
For all she knows, he is the leader.
Yeah, I know she didn't kiss him or anything, but affection from an alicorn is still quite strange, don't ya think?
As for the Project Horizons info -- I know you know it, and I know the majority of my readers would know it, but what about the ones who don't? Even then, I shouldn't make this story just assume you've read other stories entirely. Yes I make references that would require you to know the first story and yes there are some more basic parts that you would need to know the basic layout for, but really I want this story to stand on its own four hooves as well, meaning some information has to be retold in a slight variation to make it make sense on its own.
Not saying that you're in the wrong for pointing that bit out -- just wanted to say that I don't want to be like; "hey, go read Project Horizons to understand what the fuck I'm talking about here, mmkay?"
Yup, pretty words for Cherry. I've got some more pretty words for her planned out, but they're for later in the story. Their relationship moves fast and I admit I wish it could be a little slower, but for what I envision and the restains of writing a story like this, I decided to go for the quick get together and quick bonding variation, with Crimson taking a page directly from my book and being a hopeless romantic once he actually cares for somepony - though in the past he's been quite the mares buck, he's never really felt this way before.
I will admit a lot of this chapter was filler, but I wanted it to be something fillery for Crimson to just be able to calm down with, something that lets the reader have a pause from big world building or combat filled moments. Don't get me wrong, I do like building the world and I do like having combat, but I also want it to have some lulls for both the readers and for the characters so it's not non stop in your face.
===onto the next chapters review===
Ah yes, pain. Most pain is indeed pointless, but the pain I'm going for in that motto is not a punch to the face type pain, but the pain of living in an oppressive wasteland, under a tyrannical governing body who makes your life hell in every way they can for their own benefit, leaving you with no other option to endure because to leave means certain, grissly death and to incite a revolution takes more then one set of hooves.
Curves around her face talk quite literally of the things like her smile, her eyes, her cheeks, jaw, ears, mane - all that. He's talking about how beautiful she really is on a superficial level.
...That is EXACTLY what's happening in the scene with the radbit, LOL. Well, almost. The radbit doesn't trust him like he/it does her, though.
Nah, Maisy was just outside. Within easy earshot as she was literally by the window. Another thing I fail to describe properly, it seems.
As for her intelligence, she's intelligent enough to understand and follow basic commands, enough so that she can feel embarrassment too - but not as far as being able to have a full discussion in return. She just understands basic language and can respond in her own way, seeing as she's been brought up her entire life by a pony.
I wouldn't quite call her smart enough for advanced military tactics, for example, though she does understand that attacking from behind generally works better, if that makes sense?
Oh god. I seriously love this part of your review. Absolute gold.
Would you ever mind if I used something like this in my story later on, giving you another mention in the credits for it?
Heh, for Cherry, self defence goes as far as it needs to before they stop. If they're willing to lay down their weapons and cease hostilities, she'll more then likely make sure that they can't simply use them against her a moment later and accept it as doing the wasteland a favour by giving it another chance.
To then kill them is something she doesn't like thinking about doing unless its necessary for the mission and safety of others, so to call it justice rather then self defence is something necessary for her.
Thanks though, I'm trying to think of all that stuff now it's been brought up in a way that I can actually work with it, rather than being told that my characters are too good in fights and they're all mary sue.
As for the math part - I know I made Crimson give her more, it was intentional. She asked for twenty to cover the cost, so Crimson gives her twenty five as an extra nudge to say "Hey look, I really am friendly."
Ah, you could say it was the fault of the foalsitters for not giving her a name, but personally I meant it as it wasn't the place of the foalsitters to give her one unless they could take her away and treat her like their own, which they couldn't manage in the end (as we all know) and as such, she remained nameless until Crimson took her in as his own.
"Crimson: Oh, look! An old, grumpy lady! Let's smash her face in!"
#crimsonlogic
Am i right, or am I right? Though seriously, he could tell that something wasn't quite right with her. Was written all over her with the way she spoke, I'd say.
You are very right in this point - Crimson is the pampered son of the leader, he's gotten by on his charm and charisma, using his wings to help out where needed and making public appearances to please people. It's true that there isn't the level of poverty in Four Ridges as there is in Coltchester, but it's also true that he doesn't quite realise how idealistic he's being by telling her to go where he lives, forgetting it's not all some walk in the park and you do need to pay your way in and have some kind've skill to live there.
Though again, it is also true that it's nowhere near as exclusive as Tenpony, it just requires actually having some kind've usefulness if you plan to move in, ya know?
Perhaps, perhaps not on the matter of foreshadowing. I want to write some stuff that never really goes anywhere while also writing stuff that will go somewhere, when it doesn't look like it will. As for if this is genuine or red herring, that of course won't be told.
Again, my poor description. They're not entirely unarmoured. As for their weapons, they have throwing spears for a temporary weapon and as zebras, they're more competant at hoof to hoof then they are with most other weapons.
Though true, these are soldiers who haven't had a lot of combat experience and thus their technique is... lacking.
As mentioned just now and earlier - yes, the zebras aren't very capable with most weapon types, and even lacking in experience, there's just some things they naturally do well. Throwing spears are one of their strengths, and again, through the fleshy, weaker part of his wing where there are no bones nor even castilege, just a fine, lightweight filler.
Some ponies (Stonewing) have thick, tough wings that would laugh at the spear which was thrown at Crimson, but his are mofr for finesse then endurance.
(Endurance 4)
Project Horizons canon is indeed that they're crazy strong, but I personally take it as that the bones and structure of the wings are the strong part - the filler being much more...
Well, if the structure of their wing were likened to their rump or spine, the filler of their wings would, to me, be their throat. Still strong enough, but relatively weaker then the former part.
Yeah, they're not very experienced zebra fighters. I could've thrown top level zebs at them, but this early on it would've been throwing a supermutant master at a level 6 character. (yes, that's her actual level ATM.)
Yep, zebras went on a routine mission to fuck some little shitbag up and found out - wait, this little shitbag is a teeny tiny bit tougher then we'd been told. Not only that, he has a manticore for support and just as our own support comes along, so does some old world figure with a fucking explosive minigun.
Little shitbag 1 - zebras 0.
Thank you for your reviews, and thank you for the positive comments! This really does mean a hell of a lot to me, it helps me go on knowing that someone is actually reading what I write and enjoying what I do.
I write so much but get so few reviews, it really does make it hard sometimes.
Glad I could hit the marks for you, hope you're enjoying yourself enough to continue out of actually wanting to rather then simply wanting to do it to make me happy.
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
swicked wrote:Kippershy wrote:
DON'T YOU LOOK AT ME LIKE THAT. I KNOW THE TRUTH ABOUT YOU.
You just don't like to view yourself as embracing it is all.
-pokes tongue out-I had never known what having a child was like, but within these few moments, I understood why everypony who was anything decent of a parent had said it was something truly special.
If your response to the former meant my response to the later, then... it's more how you said it. Shouldn't it be, like... "I had never known what having a child was like, but within these few moments, I understood how it was something truly special."?
You intentionally, or Crimson intentionally, brings up the topic of sucky parents and uses the experience of holding a child to feel superior to those who don't feel the way he does. It's just... odd. It feels out of place to me. Like looking at a painting and remarking that only idiots wouldn't find it amazing. Or something.
You take a fantastic positive and seed it with a bitter negative.
Maybe this is your own opinion seeping into Crimson's. Maybe it's Crimson's, having met many bad parents. I dunno. It set me back a bit, is all.
After all, even if a parent didn't find a baby such a special thing in and of itself, does that really mean they would be terrible parents? That they couldn't still love the child or something?
I just... didn't get it.
Oh, and with that old, grumpy slave owner mare. You state she has gray hair, I believe. I was imagining a cranky granny smith. I kinda wanted her to crumple under the hit and be yelling at Crimson as he ran away "Rapscallion! Come back here and help me up so I can beat the crap out of you!"
Oooh, okay. I got ya now.
Nah, that's me accidentally throwing myself in there too much.
Obviously it's hard to write without a trace of who you are/how you feel on certain topics unless you're actively going against something you stand for to be in character of someone, so yeah.
It completely comes from my own fucked up childhood, and is completely unintentionally added. Still, it's in there now so I'll think of a way to work it out while still trying to voice how special it is to him.
Though like I say, my fucked up childhood seeping in a little by accident there, sorry x_______x
hahahaha. Oh, what an image that'd be.
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Chapter 13 is up.
10,779 words for the chapter which brings it to 135,678 words total and just before the 6 month old date of the 24th, too!
That's right, in three days, Broken Bonds will be 6 months old!
By the current rate, it should mean I achieve somewhere around 260-270k words by one year... which compared to Horizons having somewhere around 950k for its first birthday, is shockingly poor.
But I'm happy with what I've got so far, I'm only young and this is my first ever proper attempt at writing a story - I'm surprised it's gotten as far as it has and I'm even more surprised it's got the followers and views it does, so it's not too bad, all things considered.
10,779 words for the chapter which brings it to 135,678 words total and just before the 6 month old date of the 24th, too!
That's right, in three days, Broken Bonds will be 6 months old!
By the current rate, it should mean I achieve somewhere around 260-270k words by one year... which compared to Horizons having somewhere around 950k for its first birthday, is shockingly poor.
But I'm happy with what I've got so far, I'm only young and this is my first ever proper attempt at writing a story - I'm surprised it's gotten as far as it has and I'm even more surprised it's got the followers and views it does, so it's not too bad, all things considered.
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Good for you, man. I started writing around 5.4 months ago, and I'm at 97913 words published as of now, but I've been in a block for the past month or so. What now bugs me is that my first story, with its super-short chapters, (23 chapters @30303 words) moderate grammar, no characterization, and mediocre plot, has nearly as many views and a higher like ratio than your story--which I can tell is superior--despite being newer.
You deserve more credit.
You deserve more credit.
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Eugh, fuck month long blocks. I had that happen to me, too.
My best friend, someone I was insanely close with and loved dearly... well, she fucked me hard, damn hard.
At first she was the person always pushing me to write more, always with words of encouragement and telling me how good I was doing.
After the incident we had, I didn't have it in me to write for a month, shit was hard.
It also caused another two or three week gap some time after too, but that got kicked out of my system too.
I've had a few blocks like that, but I always find someone who helps me out just enough. So much love for the people that do.
I haven't read any of your work so I have no clue at all how honest you're being with your quality of work, personally I don't think my stuff is all that great - I like it, I love my story and I'm in love with my characters, but the over-all quality of the writing itself to me, isn't all that.
My best friend, someone I was insanely close with and loved dearly... well, she fucked me hard, damn hard.
At first she was the person always pushing me to write more, always with words of encouragement and telling me how good I was doing.
After the incident we had, I didn't have it in me to write for a month, shit was hard.
It also caused another two or three week gap some time after too, but that got kicked out of my system too.
I've had a few blocks like that, but I always find someone who helps me out just enough. So much love for the people that do.
I haven't read any of your work so I have no clue at all how honest you're being with your quality of work, personally I don't think my stuff is all that great - I like it, I love my story and I'm in love with my characters, but the over-all quality of the writing itself to me, isn't all that.
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I'll get to reading chapter 13 tomorrow, most likely. I re-read the first 3 chapters of FOE today, so I'm kinda burnt out.
I hope things work out for motivation, I've never written anything long enough that it required more than, at most, a few hours of thinking.
I hope things work out for motivation, I've never written anything long enough that it required more than, at most, a few hours of thinking.
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Protip: it took me about a day or perhaps two [literally] to plan Broken Bonds.
I started on Friday the 13th of Jan 2012 (day of my operation) by jotting down notes for things like Crimsons name and the name of Four Ridges, who his first companion was going to be
(It was going to be a slave that Crimson bought from Usury for 500 caps, down from 1,250 because she had active camo magic and kept trying to break out... He was going to fall in love with her and she would at first decline his love, then eventually come round to it.)
As for the story length, hah, well, let's put it this way.... my original plan was fucking short. I think I had the plan ready to wrap up by chapter 10 or 11.
Then it got longer and I was going to get something at chapter eight, but then chapter four came and ruined that (which I'm glad of).
Then it got longer, the story got more complex, my characters evolved and a lot of things changed. All for the better.
Even now I doubt the story is really long enough, but I'm trying to figure out what would be interesting enough to make it last longer while not just being filler.
I started on Friday the 13th of Jan 2012 (day of my operation) by jotting down notes for things like Crimsons name and the name of Four Ridges, who his first companion was going to be
(It was going to be a slave that Crimson bought from Usury for 500 caps, down from 1,250 because she had active camo magic and kept trying to break out... He was going to fall in love with her and she would at first decline his love, then eventually come round to it.)
As for the story length, hah, well, let's put it this way.... my original plan was fucking short. I think I had the plan ready to wrap up by chapter 10 or 11.
Then it got longer and I was going to get something at chapter eight, but then chapter four came and ruined that (which I'm glad of).
Then it got longer, the story got more complex, my characters evolved and a lot of things changed. All for the better.
Even now I doubt the story is really long enough, but I'm trying to figure out what would be interesting enough to make it last longer while not just being filler.
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Pink Eyes was only 20 chapters in all. And it was good, IMO, so length isn't as much a factor as quality. Kkat and Somber have made good and long stories. PH isn't Somber's first story, and I doubt FO:E is Kkat's first, either. I don't know and won't bother checking for Mimezenga.
For a first story, I'd say you're doing great.
Neat to see how the plotline evolved from that to what it is, being centered on love(From what you've said)rather than a critical mission.
For a first story, I'd say you're doing great.
Neat to see how the plotline evolved from that to what it is, being centered on love(From what you've said)rather than a critical mission.
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When I began writing, I sat down at my computer on a Saturday morning after reading a fanfic the night before, Hands, I believe it was, and just said, 'ya know what, why don't you give it a try?' And after finishing that over a period of one month, I began to write the sequel. For reasons mostly for the hell of it, it contains two crossover segments (Pokémon and Fallout, the latter is depicted in its cover art) and was fun as hell to write. However, I asked for feedback once on it, and guess what happened when I was told it wasn't very good, already at 25000 words? I broke. I gave a hasty, terrible ending and called it quits. A week or two later, I began to re-write it. The re-boot is far better, twenty thousand words longer, and ended on a cliffhanger, open to expansion at any point, yet still concluded for now.
What I learned from these experiences is that if you ever feel compromised as a writer, do not fall to despair; take the advice in stride, and keep going onward.
Though, taking the time to fix it all up after you're done is a good thing, too.
What I learned from these experiences is that if you ever feel compromised as a writer, do not fall to despair; take the advice in stride, and keep going onward.
Though, taking the time to fix it all up after you're done is a good thing, too.
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A little review.
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- As I begin reading, I realize I've forgotten what is happening. A quick re-read of the last paragraph of chapter 12 brings the wanted refresher.
Still, that is kinda confusing. These Coltchester Anarchists seem to depend on misdirection in combat. An explanation is coming soon, I hope.
Titan has thermal vision. Interesting touch. I wonder where he got it.
Not many crazies will tend their wounded.
Magic field? Oh yeah, this is from Cherry's perspective.
"How are you going to hit me, what you can't even see me?"
Might need to be 'when' instead of 'what'.
It got worse.
Titan has explosive minigun rounds? Must be magical, because 5mm can't hold a practical amount of explosive.
I wonder who's doing the throat cutting.
These Anarchists sure are mean ponies. I wonder what their beef is.
This'll be interesting.
Joining the Coalition for protection from a ruthless enemy. Seemed like a good idea at the time, huh?
Good thing the Resistance is around.
Loyal pony is loyal.
"It became exceedingly obvious to me just how torn Coltchester was, though the majority preferred to let sleeping manticores lie"
Period needed here.
Because no government is better than a government that promises change. Sure...
The Anarchists seem like they could be very dangerous allies, they ought to keep an eye on them.
So that's why we haven't heard of the Anarchists yet. They seem quite large for a group of such low renown.
As soon as they reached the pile of rubble, I couldn't help but think: "Give me the location of the rubble base." In the voice of Darth Vader.
I'm glad that you used the term 'suppressed' rather than 'silenced'. Suppressed is much more accurate.
A very affectionate couple.
I wonder where Titan plans to take her next.
PSB is pretty funny.
Yep, shotguns certainly pack a bigger punch compared to pistol-round-spewers.
I wonder how long it'll be until Cherry learns of his addiction.
'Project in the ridges?' I thought it was a collaboration made by a bunch of random settlers who decided outside a Stable would be an ideal place. Or it describes the wall with the magic sentries, or the Stable itself.
Who'd mess up a courier's establishment?
Well, they found that out quick.
I wonder who this is. She seems pretty spirited.
Great. Another faction. I wonder what the ZUC are all about.
Not a trusting bunch.
Ack! Rhymes!
"We can't take him in as a resistance fighter because he;s too young, and without being able to earn his keep he'd simply be a drain on resources."
Replace ';' with '.
The unfortunate truth about refugees. If you offer to take one, be prepared to deal with more.
Cherry has a strong sense of empathy.
Crapsack worlds tend to make orphans out of many.
Cherry might just show no remorse for the next DZCs she faces in combat. Bastards.
They wouldn't have any trouble getting him to become a soldier.
Now this whole checkpoint deal could get messy. 2 battle rifle shots would easily incapacitate or kill a pony.
Poor stallion.
At least they have some restraint.
Yeah, that buck certainly is going to do something stupid.
Shit. Anarchists.
Actually, that went better than expected. Except, now they gotta find Sandstorm.
Star Swirls is alright, which is good.
Trouble.
And I guess we get Sandstorm next chapter?
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ketchup504 wrote:A little review.Good job on this one, the action was diverse and the situations tense. Sort of like Dayz.
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As I begin reading, I realize I've forgotten what is happening. A quick re-read of the last paragraph of chapter 12 brings the wanted refresher.
Still, that is kinda confusing. These Coltchester Anarchists seem to depend on misdirection in combat. An explanation is coming soon, I hope.
Titan has thermal vision. Interesting touch. I wonder where he got it.
Not many crazies will tend their wounded.
Magic field? Oh yeah, this is from Cherry's perspective.
"How are you going to hit me, what you can't even see me?"
Might need to be 'when' instead of 'what'.
It got worse.
Titan has explosive minigun rounds? Must be magical, because 5mm can't hold a practical amount of explosive.
I wonder who's doing the throat cutting.
These Anarchists sure are mean ponies. I wonder what their beef is.
This'll be interesting.
Joining the Coalition for protection from a ruthless enemy. Seemed like a good idea at the time, huh?
Good thing the Resistance is around.
Loyal pony is loyal.
"It became exceedingly obvious to me just how torn Coltchester was, though the majority preferred to let sleeping manticores lie"
Period needed here.
Because no government is better than a government that promises change. Sure...
The Anarchists seem like they could be very dangerous allies, they ought to keep an eye on them.
So that's why we haven't heard of the Anarchists yet. They seem quite large for a group of such low renown.
As soon as they reached the pile of rubble, I couldn't help but think: "Give me the location of the rubble base." In the voice of Darth Vader.
I'm glad that you used the term 'suppressed' rather than 'silenced'. Suppressed is much more accurate.
A very affectionate couple.
I wonder where Titan plans to take her next.
PSB is pretty funny.
Yep, shotguns certainly pack a bigger punch compared to pistol-round-spewers.
I wonder how long it'll be until Cherry learns of his addiction.
'Project in the ridges?' I thought it was a collaboration made by a bunch of random settlers who decided outside a Stable would be an ideal place. Or it describes the wall with the magic sentries, or the Stable itself.
Who'd mess up a courier's establishment?
Well, they found that out quick.
I wonder who this is. She seems pretty spirited.
Great. Another faction. I wonder what the ZUC are all about.
Not a trusting bunch.
Ack! Rhymes!
"We can't take him in as a resistance fighter because he;s too young, and without being able to earn his keep he'd simply be a drain on resources."
Replace ';' with '.
The unfortunate truth about refugees. If you offer to take one, be prepared to deal with more.
Cherry has a strong sense of empathy.
Crapsack worlds tend to make orphans out of many.
Cherry might just show no remorse for the next DZCs she faces in combat. Bastards.
They wouldn't have any trouble getting him to become a soldier.
Now this whole checkpoint deal could get messy. 2 battle rifle shots would easily incapacitate or kill a pony.
Poor stallion.
At least they have some restraint.
Yeah, that buck certainly is going to do something stupid.
Shit. Anarchists.
Actually, that went better than expected. Except, now they gotta find Sandstorm.
Star Swirls is alright, which is good.
Trouble.
And I guess we get Sandstorm next chapter?
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Thank you for the review, ever so much appreciated =3
Good pick up on the what/when with Cherry, that's down to a rewrite of the sentence and forgetting to change that part of it >.< Ooops, lo..
And the same to the rest of your grammar/typo pick ups - all very much appreciated.
Now for a point by point response and such =3
Yup, me being such a slow author and there being so many other stories does make it hard on people, I know. Shame really, but at least you can remember without too much effort.
Yes, the Anarchists very much do rely on misdirection and confusion. They aren't trained like Titan, Cherry or even Crimson in the art of refined combat, instead, they rely on guerilla tactics that hit fast and make it as hard on their opponent as they can to keep lines of contact open.
As such, smoke grenades filling the area is their main tactic, allowing them to move without being seen and strike like a ghost.
The answer to Titans thermal imaging is actually quite simple, I was going to write it into the chapter but then found it almost sounded corny.
Not trying to be all spoiler spoiler here, just a little thing. It's basically because he was a soldier he was given access to higher grade technology then Blackjack was when she was augmented, despite the younger technology.
Professor stripe (IIRC on her name) wouldn't have had needed T.I because she's not a soldier or a fighter -- it was never planned for her to give her bodyparts away as soon as she could use them.
For Titan's explosive rounds, it's briefly explained back in chapter... eight I think? He got that ability from a zebra explosive talisman that was salvaged from a zebra Superhoof mk II after he destroyed it by himself in a courageous act of self sacrifice that could've (and almost had) killed him.
As a reward, it was implanted into his minigun to give him a bigger boost.
The Anarchists... as a whole they're not mean, it's just the fact there is no solid leadership nor joining process, more that you just put on a cloak and take the fight to the DZC as you see fit.
It's unorganised and anyone can claim to be acting as one, but it's more of a general dissidence rather then an organised following like the PLAC.
Loyal pony is indeed loyal, he cares for his wife above all else, and will stick with her through anything she asks. [if that's who you're referring to.]
He would do anything to keep her safe.
As far as the Anarchists see it, no government will ever keep their promises of change, they'll only make empty words and pretty sentences to gain power to abuse it thmeselves.
Well, not -everyone- in the Anarchist movement, but it's the general feel of the group.
The Anarchists are basically a pony version of Anonymous.
I completely and utterly laughed at the rubble base / darth vader part, thank you.
I assume you mean CS/CW with the affectionate couple part? If so, very true.
I'm a very, very affectionate person myself - an utter hopeless romantic. Crimson and Cherry are my projection of the perfect couple and relationship.
Is this a bad thing? perhaps, but it's how I want them to be, it's part of why I enjoy writing Broken Bonds so much. They make me feel better in myself, in a totally 'autistic loser' way.
I'm glad the scene with PSB was funny for you. One line I especially loved as I wrote it was the whole "Ewwww, Radbit kisses" as Cherry kissed Crimson after kissing PSB.
Project in the ridges... this one is going to take a moment to explain.
Four Ridges as it stands today [roll with it] was indeed built and maintained by a collaboration between Stable ponies and the odd few ponies that had managed to wander on in after noticing the thick, strong walls and finding the one entrance open.
The locals provided the ponypower to rebuild properly and keep it reasonable (and which the population of has skyrocketed since the Stable opened).
When the Stable opened, they provided the technology and know how in rebuilding and securing the perimeter of Four Ridges.
This lead to it becoming a full on place to live, as we know it now.
Back 210~ years ago, "Four Ridges" didn't exist in any way at all.
205~ years ago, it went from being just an idea on paper to a project to physically secure a piece of land and reinforce it with the means to defend itself and provide for itself - creating a self sustaining environment in event of a war.
(Though nuclear warfare wasn't considered in the planning stages).
The military worked hoof in hoof with Stabletec to change the plan to reality.
Anything more would be going past trivial information and into stuff which I have yet to delve into.
The dates are all estimates that I made up on the spot right now, the rest of the information can be pieced together by anyone willing to look in enough depth over the different chapters for such hints and snips.
Too many factions too soon? Or are you speaking in terms of "Oh great, another problem for Crimson. Wonder how this will go?"
Yup, that's the problem with refugees indeed. Titan understands that, Crimson doesn't, despite his training.
His training has never really pushed into that side of things, Four Ridges have never really had a big refugee issue. Sure, there's been times where a small group of ponies (up to 10 or so) have come to them seeking refuge and been accepted, but there's never been a steady supply of them or of immense number.
So it's not something he understands, though Titan does - as seen this chapter.
(Again, more trivial info made up on the spot. Don't worry).
Cherry has a long way to come yet, though I definitley know how you could think that.
She's more logical then to just go after anyone at all though...
and when you say 'get Sandstorm', which way exactly do you mean?
I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I'm glad I hit my mark. I wanted this chapter to be tense and uncertain, partly hence the title for it (Disharmony).
The other, main reason for the title was because I wanted to convey that it's not just one group effort to rebel, lots of different people have lots of different ideas on how to go about it and they don't work together - disharmony.
Glad to hear the chapter was diverse, tense and reminded you of Day Z. We both know that's a good thing.
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I'm happy to do reviews. They seem to help me process the chapter in a deeper way. And, perhaps help the writer.
Thanks for the clarification on the origins of Four Ridges and on the minigun's explosive properties.
I was referring to Crimson and Cherry as affectionate, and Honeydew and her husband as the loyal ponies.
There aren't too many factions, just expressing that it could be a bad thing for another faction to be in Coltchester. They may very well end up fighting several.
What I mean by 'get Sandstorm' is that they just left him behind. I was under the impression that they were going to take him to the base.
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I'm happy to do reviews. They seem to help me process the chapter in a deeper way. And, perhaps help the writer.
Thanks for the clarification on the origins of Four Ridges and on the minigun's explosive properties.
I was referring to Crimson and Cherry as affectionate, and Honeydew and her husband as the loyal ponies.
There aren't too many factions, just expressing that it could be a bad thing for another faction to be in Coltchester. They may very well end up fighting several.
What I mean by 'get Sandstorm' is that they just left him behind. I was under the impression that they were going to take him to the base.
Oh, my bad. He's actually riding on Cherry's back (they pick him up before the timeskip).
I'll go back and clarify that if it's not so, though I think I do mention how she puts him back on her shoulders. (or meant to, at the very least.)
Thought so @ affectionate and assumed you meant the guy with the loyal bit, but yeah, they have no loyalty to the coalition, they were purely doing it for survival.
Good to see that you meant that the factions could get dangerous to one another.
edit: It is in there, you silly pon-e
(Just after Cherry spares the commander, before talking of honour.)
Swiftly making our way through the haze, we found the other size and I
spotted Storm cowering by the red roofed market stand like I'd told him
to. Handing it to the colt, he followed orders pretty well when it meant
he'd carry on living.
Rushing over to him, I picked him up and put him onto my back before galloping as fast as I could without outrunning Titan.
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Yeah, I added the Honeydew part to clarify, I meant her husband, whatshisname.
Must've skipped the paragraph. I just remember her sparing the commander and them walking past the checkpoint, then talking about honor after she showed the knife.
Must've skipped the paragraph. I just remember her sparing the commander and them walking past the checkpoint, then talking about honor after she showed the knife.
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Some things I noticed while searching TVtropes. Obviously not every trope I've ever used, but ones that I came across / stuck out to me.
WARNING, THIS SPOILER IS NO JOKE. THIS IS -ACTUAL- SPOILER STUFF -
Though I don't explicitly state what's going to happen to who, when or how, some of these listed here can count as massive spoilers in a way, I suppose.
Read at your own risk.
There is more I could've listed, but I really don't want to ruin this any further then this already has.
I could easily just link you to the overall plotline document though... but that'd really be at your own risk.
WARNING, THIS SPOILER IS NO JOKE. THIS IS -ACTUAL- SPOILER STUFF -
Though I don't explicitly state what's going to happen to who, when or how, some of these listed here can count as massive spoilers in a way, I suppose.
Read at your own risk.
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failure-to-save murder -- C8 -- Platinum
The big guy -- C4 -- Maisy, C11 Titan, 153
One man army -- 153
Taking you with me -- 153
I'm taking her with me -- C8 -- Cherished Chance
There is more I could've listed, but I really don't want to ruin this any further then this already has.
I could easily just link you to the overall plotline document though... but that'd really be at your own risk.
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After a whole day, it's not as flashy as I'd like it to be - I can't enter the inventory like I'd plan to allow myself to do, but hey, it works.
Crimson wings (and Cherry Sundae) are followers.
Crimson wings (and Cherry Sundae) are followers.
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So it turns out it IS as flashy... well fuck, no, even FLASHIER then I'd planned.
I can choose to put pipboys onto them, make them wear collars, make them do a load of advanced stuff... you just gotta do it through speech, is all.
Now my next step is to try figure out how to voice them.
I can choose to put pipboys onto them, make them wear collars, make them do a load of advanced stuff... you just gotta do it through speech, is all.
Now my next step is to try figure out how to voice them.
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The FO:NV mod I've been working on is now somewhat worthy of being used.
The troubles that were arising should've been ironed out now.
The fallout nexus page can be found here and here's just two of the 10 pictures currently uploaded:
The troubles that were arising should've been ironed out now.
The fallout nexus page can be found here and here's just two of the 10 pictures currently uploaded:
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
Titan has just had his photoshoot uploaded.
There's also this bonus pic I took for the lulz when I found the poses while searching through.
There's 140 poses to go through, I've searched about 100 of them.
...there's no index to this, either.
Anyway, picture: (warning: adult theme)
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There's also this bonus pic I took for the lulz when I found the poses while searching through.
There's 140 poses to go through, I've searched about 100 of them.
...there's no index to this, either.
Anyway, picture: (warning: adult theme)
- Spoiler:
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
This is me.. enjoying my photo editing...
Fixed the images by uploading to photobucket instead.
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Fixed the images by uploading to photobucket instead.
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Kippershy- Lord of Derail
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Name: Crimson Wings / Cherry Sundae
Sex: Male / Female
Species: Pegasus / Unicorn
Re: Fallout Equestria: Broken Bonds.
Oh hoho hoho
That adult theme picture!
That adult theme picture!
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