Re: Writing exercise / game

[Frost]

@Swicked: I might be able to come up with something for that last one. The others don't really work for me.

[Frost]

Although Ronin are cool, and Paladins are also cool. I might try that for my next blurb. I need to make something that's not gray and depressing, anyway.

[Harmony Ltd.]

I need to make something that's not gray and depressing, anyway.

Oh Boy.

[Frost]

I need to make something that's not gray and depressing, anyway.

Oh Boy.

 John's a dog, ain't he?

[Harmony Ltd.]

John's what you want John to be.

[Frost]

Well a solid 7/10 parents don't crush children in boxes after a tragic death, so......

[Harmony Ltd.]

Spoiler:

[Frost]

Spoiler:

 Regardless, I really do have a (probably dumb-ass) idea for that New Holy War thing, I'm just currently wondering how to fit the backstory into the blurb proper without completely breaking the narrative flow for an info-dump

[Harmony Ltd.]

A thing that's often done in sci-fi short stories is to just use the technical terms and in-universe history references "as a matter of fact", "assuming" the reader knows what is being talked about. Read some Asimov short stories to understand what I'm talking about.

[Frost]

That's quite a good idea. Think I'll give it a shot when I'm back in a writing-conducive environment (as opposed to my damn phone)

[Guest]

Possible Swicked prompt:

[Meleagridis]

wicked10:

I'm always a little hesitant to do things with only dialogue, but sometimes I really don't want to spare any focus on anything other than the words...
Thing

I need to make something that's not gray and depressing, anyway.

Oh Boy.

As I was reading, I was trying very hard to identify the speaker, toddling between a dog or a mentally challenged family member.

Either one made the box bit crushing (no pun intended, for once).

On that subject:

[Frost]

wicked10:

I'm always a little hesitant to do things with only dialogue, but sometimes I really don't want to spare any focus on anything other than the words...
Thing

 Decent. I like the mystery that gets involved with stylistic choices like all-dialogue.

Unfortunately, the Bottom-Dweller's lines tended a tad on the cheesy side, while the Top-Dweller was almost annoyingly a "blank slate" character

[Meleagridis]

Unfortunately, the Bottom-Dweller's lines tended a tad on the cheesy side, while the Top-Dweller was almost annoyingly a "blank slate" character

Then I'll pull a cheese transfusion next time, put some life and maybe multiple sentences into Topsy. I find that boring characters with no lines are an easy fix. Not so easy for excessive cheesiness, though. I don't have quick fixes for that. Thanks for the heads up.

[Harmony Ltd.]

As I was reading, I was trying very hard to identify the speaker, toddling between a dog or a mentally challenged family member.

Either one made the box bit crushing (no pun intended, for once).

Interesting. It's probably because I'm the one who wrote the thing, but the nature of the speaker was semi-obvious to me.

Care to elaborate

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[Meleagridis]

I never thought it was a kid. I was getting the vibe of someone fully grown, but not at the mental development level of a human adult. They were connected to the family in some way, but not as close as an actual child.

When the end came around, I just wasn't entirely sure what to believe. I figured that, since they were clearly not on the same level as a thinking adult, maybe they were interpreting things differently.

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[Harmony Ltd.]

Possible inspiration :

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Both shots are from this album : http://www.spiegel.de/fotostrecke/photo-gallery-derelict-detroit-fotostrecke-63754.html

[Frost]

Between those two and our conversation about the New Holy War yesterday, I've got an almost-not-shit idea brewing. If only I could stay off Darksiders 2 long enough to play it

[StoneSlinger88]

I've got a prompt for anyone who wants one. Source: "Fall of the Peacemakers".

"The hush of the crowd as the horse rode by -
The black lace veil hid her tears from my eyes..."

[Frost]

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Spoiler:

I think I'm going to have to warm up to these writing drills. I don't often write prose, and never have as a result of other people's prompts. I mean, my creative writing classes in high school would offer stylistic stuff like "Write a story in second person.", but never anything that would actually test anyone. It was not that good of a school.

Still, I wrote something for this. Also something for Last's bleeding woman picture, but it's a poem, so I still need to convert it to prose.
I really, really need to re-learn how to write creatively, I guess...

I also don't know how to use gdocs:

 There a particular reason absolutely none of that dialogue is in quotes? Because if it's not a conversation toward the end, it certainly seems like one.

[Frost]

Aside from that, though, I liked it. It was somewhat amusing that they went through all the trouble dealing with a creature that may or may not have even been the "fuck people over for fun" type of genie.

[Frost]

I've got a prompt for anyone who wants one. Source: "Fall of the Peacemakers".

"The hush of the crowd as the horse rode by -
The black lace veil hid her tears from my eyes..."

 I like it. I might be able to shit something out

[Frost]

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Spoiler:

This.
This and the four horsemen from the first page, though not as they look there

Note that I stopped after the first page or so, didn't know what to do next, and picked it up again later.

In any case, I like the result well-enough, and it's a better example of my writing style than the last thing was.

 I'm sorry, I'm a bit confused. 

We've got Red--War, obviously, and Black--Famine. We've also got Pale and Green, who are both Death (the word translated into 'pale' in Revelations describes a sickly green color, like a corpse) but no White, which is the color of Conquest or Pestilence, depending on your interpretation. I suppose that first woman was Pestilence, though. 

The Horsemen also acted a fair bit like normal people. It makes setting up the comedic scene easier, but one would expect that anthropomorphic personifications of four very, very I pleasant concepts would have traces of them in their personalities.

[Frost]

In Good Omens, the Four are not only far from normal, but practically egging on the apocalypse. 

Red-War instigates wars and conflicts, and in many cases actually arms the combatants. 

Black-Famine owns a food corporation whose products actually cause starvation 

White-Pollution(who took over for Pestilence. As usual, Conquest is not mentioned) goes around causing oil spills and industrial accidents

[Harmony Ltd.]

I need to make something that's not gray and depressing, anyway.

Oh Boy.

Spoiler:

Thank you.  

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Man...

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[Harmony Ltd.]

In Good Omens, the Four are not only far from normal, but practically egging on the apocalypse. 

Red-War instigates wars and conflicts, and in many cases actually arms the combatants. 

Black-Famine owns a food corporation whose products actually cause starvation 

White-Pollution(who took over for Pestilence. As usual, Conquest is not mentioned) goes around causing oil spills and industrial accidents

Yeah, that's what they're doing with their lives, not how they acted when talking to each oth...

...nevermind, I'm not going to defend this.
I screwed up their interpretation, clearly.
I'm taking it back, now.

Edit: Please remove the story from your post, Frost.

Edit2: Thanks.
Personally, though, I still like what I wrote.

FYI,

I liked it. On its own it was fine.

[Harmony Ltd.]

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[Harmony Ltd.]

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[Meleagridis]

Prompt:

wicked9:

I tried this one.

[Frost]

Heh. That was pretty awesome.

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