Re: Writing exercise / game

[Frost]

Finally managed to get to a place where I could read it. Pretty good, as usual from you. My main problem with it is that now I want a full-length story, and that probably won't happen.

 NOPE! BAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!

 Dammit, I'll work with you, just make it happen!

[Frost]

 This is pretty dry and mediocre, but here we go: Bad Story

 I like it. It has good tension for how short it is, and has the bare bones of a universe (which I instantly headcanoned as the Mech Warrior universe because of the 'Core Worlds' thing, but I'm also insane).

 Nope. Not familiar enough with the Battletech universe to make even a short blurb like that set in there. That's just a bland ol' used-future sci-fi setting

[CamoBadger]

Finally managed to get to a place where I could read it. Pretty good, as usual from you. My main problem with it is that now I want a full-length story, and that probably won't happen.

 NOPE! BAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!

 Dammit, I'll work with you, just make it happen!

 NO! I already have 2 stories I'm working on, plus a third that people are insisting I continue from that damn writing contest 

[Frost]

Finally managed to get to a place where I could read it. Pretty good, as usual from you. My main problem with it is that now I want a full-length story, and that probably won't happen.

 NOPE! BAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!

 Dammit, I'll work with you, just make it happen!

 NO! I already have 2 stories I'm working on, plus a third that people are insisting I continue from that damn writing contest 

 I think the problem here is your excuses.

[CamoBadger]

 I think the problem here is your excuses.

 Silence you, if I ever remember it exists after getting further on the other stories, maybe I'll go back to it.

[Frost]

 I think the problem here is your excuses.

 Silence you, if I ever remember it exists after getting further on the other stories, maybe I'll go back to it.

 Don't worry. I'll pester you anytime you get anywhere close to forgetting.

[Frost]

Meanwhile, I need something to pass the time until I ship anyway, so I can expand on any blurbs I write if there's interest.

[Meleagridis]

Prompt::

[Frost]

Huh. Not sure what I can do with that, aside from having two truck drivers talk about the families they're protecting while hiding the body they ran over in their truck.

[Frost]

Prompt?:

 

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Don't know if this works:

[Frost]

I find you're rarely as attached to things as me. I take that as a sign of your inferiority.

Regardless, I think you raise valid points on the story. Do me next!

[Frost]

Eh, I think feedback is a decent part of the idea. Run along, now. Dissect my shitty story.

[Frost]

I mentioned that the room around them is "grey" because that's what it is--it's an economy-class berth on a starship, and it's pretty much just a steel room with bunks and the launch seating. 

I know it seems a bit incomplete, but that, in all honesty, has as much to do with me being distracted as I wrote as it does with stylistic choice. The big status-quo change would undoubtedly happen in a longer/expanded story, but for the little blurb I wanted to focus on setting up the scene and situation (with appropriate vagueness) more than setting up a storyline

[Frost]

I will take that into consideration. Thanks for the tip, and the read-through

[Frost]

I think I get what you're saying.

Any of these prompts catching your eye, by the way? I wouldn't mind getting a glimpse into the writing of The Swick.

[CamoBadger]

@swicked: Thanks. And yeah, getting reviews on stuff is always good, even if it's just a little blurb done for fun. Helped me out a lot in my writing class when we did exercises like this, and always will help, so thanks for that ^-^

 @Frost (new prompts): The first one I think would be easiest for me, but I could work with the second one too, maybe. Not really the third one though. Now I need to decide if I should try it out tonight or if I should wait until tomorrow...

[Frost]

@Camo: Obviously, you should do it right now. Mr. Lazypants.

@Swick: I know I, at least, am interested in reading some of your writing.

[Frost]

Much as I'd like to assure you otherwise......yeah, getting over yourself is step one of the solution here.

[Frost]

I tend to refer to folks who fish for complements as "Fucktards who fish for complements", so +1 respect to you.

[Frost]

What sort of prompts might you be in the mood for, then? I might be able to whip up a couple to get your muses talking.

[Harmony Ltd.]

Idea :

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[Frost]

I like the aesthetics and creative opportunities for cyberpunk-- the story possibilities opened up with the fact that many characters have information and technology literally wired into their bodies are virtually (PUN) without number. What I'm less a fan of is how aggressively anti-corporate and anti-government most cyberpunk stories are. While it's clear that they're not the most charitable of organizations, it's not like they've appointed Satan as the chief executive. 

Post-Cyberpunk, I think, is the name for the stories set in cyberpunk-style worlds with more optimistic outlooks.

[Harmony Ltd.]

The way I like to see it, "cyber"punk as a genre is "what if today's society had [technology]", the [technology] here being the "cyber" of cyberpunk. It's an exploration on the social and cultural consequences of giving today's society future technologies.

If the society has already had time to "grow-up" to completely manage the consequences of these technologies, then it's more sci-fi than cyberpunk.

Anyway, a few more ideas :

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[Harmony Ltd.]

Post-cyberpunk, on the other hand, is about people living in a cyberpunk world, but instead of living at the margin of this world, they are fully part of it, and try to change it from the inside (mostly, not always).

@ Swicked : Well, here's a few ones for you, then :

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[Frost]

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 This, I can use.

[Harmony Ltd.]

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[Frost]

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 Unsurprisingly also mediocre, but here y'all go: Boring

Hope you like a conversation that drags on for three pages of nothing happening.

[Harmony Ltd.]

Not a bad exercise in narrating conversations.

Could do with a bit more polish in places :

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Apart from that, it's an interesting exercise in narrating a conversation - a thing that's much more dynamic than just a simple exchange of words and sentences. After all, much of the actual communication between human beings pass through non-verbal means.

[Harmony Ltd.]

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[Frost]

Not a bad exercise in narrating conversations.

Could do with a bit more polish in places :

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Apart from that, it's an interesting exercise in narrating a conversation - a thing that's much more dynamic than just a simple exchange of words and sentences. After all, much of the actual communication between human beings pass through non-verbal means.

 Thanks for the tips. I know I'm not the best with conversations, and the occasional spelling error is due to a combination of my rather high typing speed and a very sensitive keyboard.

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