Writing Help: Pinkie Pie

[Scienza]

So, I've been working on a fic, and I suddenly realized that my Pinkie Pie is literally nothing like Show-Pinkie. A little OOC is fine, since it's really AU, but Pinkie's ridiculously not-Pinkie. Do any of you talented writemen have any tips and things to remember when writing the bouncy pink demon?

[Harmony Ltd.]

How exactly do you feel your Pinkie isn't Pinkie enough ?

[Scienza]

How exactly do you feel your Pinkie isn't Pinkie enough ?

She's literally not Pinkie, to the extent where you could just change her name and she'd be Rainbow Dash on LSD. Pinkie's mannerisms and personality are really bloody hard to nail down, and I'm failing on it. I know she has a different way of seeing the world and other ponies, but I can't seem to get it right.

[Harmony Ltd.]

Could we see an example of your writing of her ? That'd help pinpoint the advices.

[Scienza]

Could we see an example of your writing of her ? That'd help pinpoint the advices.

Bit of context: Celestia dies banishing Nightmare Moon, Equestria fragments in the resulting power vacuum, Pinkie is pirate.

Really rough:

[Harmony Ltd.]

You know, it may not be show!Pinkie, but taking into account she had quite a different upbringing, and given what she went through, I'm not shocked at the charaterization you do of her. from that extract, I rather like it actually : Pinkie has always been, let's say, strangely wise in the show, so that would tend to fit with how I see her in that respect, I dunno ?

But anyway, maybe you think you should make a little more bouncy ? More of a party animal ? I don't know if it'd be warranted. Like I said, she had a different upbringing, different life experiences, and from what you described she may even have some post-traumatic disorder, so...

[Scienza]

You know, it may not be show!Pinkie, but taking into account she had quite a different upbringing, and given what she went through, I'm not shocked at the charaterization you do of her. from that extract, I rather like it actually : Pinkie has always been, let's say, strangely wise in the show, so that would tend to fit with how I see her in that respect, I dunno ?

But anyway, maybe you think you should make a little more bouncy ? More of a party animal ? I don't know if it'd be warranted. Like I said, she had a different upbringing, different life experiences, and from what you described she may even have some post-traumatic disorder, so...

Thanks! That's what I was going for. The bouncy and the party animal parts are harder to capture, and I really want to use them somehow, to make the serious bits even more jarring. Pinkie's an enigma, easily the hardest character to write other than Fluttershy.

[Scyto Harmony]

Yeah, I'm a bit late to the party, but your Pinkie actually sounds pretty good. Try adding Rambling and getting off topic, she likes to do that.

[Harmony Ltd.]

Off-topic which in fact end up pretty much straight on topic when she get to the end of it, 50% of the time anyway ("And that's how Equestria was made !").

[RoboRed]

Speaking of the subject of "bouncy", my brain tells me that Pinkie is usually being written correctly if I automatically hear that incessant bouncing noise in my head...

[Scienza]

Speaking of the subject of "bouncy", my brain tells me that Pinkie is usually being written correctly if I automatically hear that incessant bouncing noise in my head...

I could add "sproing" sound effects...

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